Nice story, I like the alternative take on Alma. For the most part at least, some parts were pretty bizzare though.

Is the story completed though and you just forgot to mark it? Or is it just dead?

I LOVED the Bioshock reference since I love the Bioshock series more than any other video game series. Also I like how you try to show Alma's thoughts and actions in F.E.A.R 2.