Hey, sorry for not getting back to you 'till now.
Ok, I think you missed the point in my last review. I wasn't really asking why you did what you did with your characters, I was just stating what I think needs to be changed. Let me clarify what I was trying to say. Zelda is Princess of Hyrule. I would suggest that you spend some of your time in lockdown studying what the life of royalty was like in the medieval days. Link is the Hero of Time and Gaurdian of the Triforce of Courage, not a high school football star. Impa is a Sheikah warrior–a Legends of Zelda style Ninja! I have spent five years studying the arts of the Samurai. A Samurai must be level-headed, well mannered, obedient, brave, and silent at times, among other things. Ninjas make us Samurai look loud and obnoxious, that's how serious they are. I just can't see any Sheikah, let alone Impa, acting like the character you built.
As a writer myself, I understand what you said about this being fiction: you are right. This is non-canonical, fun fiction. I encourage you to run wild with your ideas and thoughts! That makes the story so much more interesting! But, before I was a writer, I was and am a gamer.
I am a gamer and an extreme Nintendo patriot. I am actually reading your story and commenting from my Nintendo 2DS. As gamers, the honor of these characters should come before our story. Think, Is this really what Link would do?
Yes, this is fanFICTION,(sorry, I can't do italics on a 2DS) but its also a LEGENDS OF ZELDA story. these characters have been established already, don't try to change that, PLEASE! This will be a great story if all the characters just mature into the people Nintendo created them to be.
(Now my comments on this chapter) A little long just to say Link died. Try being a little more concise with your thoughts. Now I've been where Zelda has been at the end of this chapter. Let me tell you, it hurts badly. There is nothing on this earth quite like losing your soul mate, temporarily or permanently. Zelda shouldn't have restrained herself in front of her parents at that point. Zelda should have let them know that they were responsible for the death, not only of her friend, but also the one that she loved. At this point her Princess-ish-ness should be lost, and her human nature should be taking over.
I know that I may seem harsh, but I just want you to be the best you can be. As they say in Sonic Colors, "No looking back! Not giving up! Not letting go!" (take that Elsa!) This is a good story, but in the Mario RPG games, good means only %50 of your best. I want this to be an excellent story. It's not to late to improve it!
From one gamer to another, always remember, "May the way of the hero lead to the Triforce."

Omg haha I love the smash reference! Zelda's lightning kick is awesome

Welp, hopefully this will not turn into the BOTW reunion. Link better not pull out the 100 year amnesia card while Zelda silently cries to the Goddesses that this is not what she wanted. Though I see it going that way for our heroes (and couple) because of the hardships hinted at by Ordana.

Also great chapter.

Love the BotW references, love to see how your writing style has changed from #1 to #27 :)
I think you do a great job of putting the grief into words, and it really helps me connect and see the character in myself. Anyways, keep up the good work!

P.S. I really like how you gave Impa a real personality, rather than being a mystic, far-off being that comes across as having no emotions.

Great chapter! Can't wait to see Link in the next chapter, I wonder if he has amnesia

Zelda's grief feels so real! It was very well written. Can't wait for the next one

Thanks for coming back

I loved the emotion in this chapter. which makes me want to see Zelda's reaction to Link's return even more now. It just sucks that I am going to have to wait a while again for more of this great story to be written.

Oh Zelda, I can't even imagine how heartbreaking this must be for her. I don't blame her for hating her father, if I was in her situation I would too. Link's awake, presumably with no memory but don't worry, Purah's on the case!

It’s nice to see another chapter out!

I preferred it in the third person, like it was in the first chapters. It seems to feel more natural than just hopping between people’s perspective. Also, it would allow you to swap perspective with just a horizontal line without needing to break immersion with a tag informing us of the POV change.

Other than that, nice job. Maybe Zelda, whilst she struggles to come to terms with Link’s death, reaches out using telepathy and receives a faint reply, giving her hope.

Omg you came back. I'm actually so happy rn. I'm gonna have to re-read the past few chapters c:

AHHH ITS BEEN UPDATED, in all seriousness it's nice to hear from you again, and a pleasure to see the story being updated! Imma just reread it cause I honestly forgot about these 2 lovebirds and I have nothing else to do with my spare time hah. Oh and good luck with the job life, I hope you can get more time to write and enjoy yourself :)

P.S. I wrote a review on chapter 27 a few minutes ago but I think it got lost in time and space, so I can only review on chapter 2 lmao

AHHHH ITS BEEN UPDATED, lovely chapter as usual

Awesome chapter

Another amazing chapter! I hope you stay safe and I was thinking if you have considered moving to wattpad as well, I’m sure people will love it!