I found this really interesting. Bill is such an underused character in Fanfiction, it's nice to see more of him. I liked reading from his POV, and I liked the way you did parts of the GOF from his perspective.

One mistake I caught, Voldermort should be Voldemort in the first paragraph after the break.

The last paragraph summed things up really well, and it was an enjoyable read :)

Aw what a cute little story!

I'm surprised Bill never mentioned Fleur.

Bill's amazed.
:D