Not bad, not bad

your mc is too pussy

I hope you finish this it was a good fic

I came to clap alien cheeks now I guess ima clap them poke cheeks

Assuming you mean titanfall and not teamfortress...
“Protocol three... I will NOT lose another pilot... brace for impact.”

I finally found this story after constant searching... nice story

ok this chapter was dumb... you gave him freaking superpowers what possessed you to do that? it feels cheap couldn't you just had the dude beat him the old fashioned mano a mano way?... i was genuinely enjoying the story until this chapter...

gudy

I hope this story just die I love it so far so pleas keep continued making more chapters

lol im done within the first 2 chapters, obviously the people within the world settin are all airheaded hunks who only care about ass.

Ch.21 okay I kept reading and you just had a 5-6yr old murdered for no good reason just for a twist. Then have the MC and his group continue on their travels without confirming what happened to the boy or any mention verbal or mental about the possible innocent kind child being butchered. They just move on like it never happened the next chapter.

I hate myself for reading this. That right there deserves a tragedy tag. Also you should bring up somewhere for readers in the intro/start that rape events come into play if your going that way as a courtesy.

But yeah, the needless butchering of the kid in th his story that drew my attention with the romance rag makes me want to punch you in the mouth. I loath tragedy and theres no damned tags or apparent shots given for him.

stayed up all not reading this despite already being rly tired so I'm without even more sleep and extra irritated.

Ch.11 p2

I forgot to add he completely ignored how she sacrificed herself shielding jessie from those 2 attacks. Keeping jessie from being knocked out and giving her the chance to win. So if not for her protecting jessie they would've lost as well. I love how that little bit was glossed over.

One question I do have is how does using double team some how make the pokemon teleport from a grip around her throat? That bit threw me off.

Ch.11 and I have to say I dont like this MC. Just started his adventure and knowing the scumbag is a scumbag let's himself be goaded easily into dancing him with his brand new mentally if not also physically stressed out pokemon who needs rest. Waiting a single day at least and figuring out what she could do wouldnt make him a chicken if he felt he HAD to battle.

Then hes goaded again with ease and the same shit only getting knowledge of what she knows only despite hearing she already had the equivalent of 5 badges AND used everstones.

Finally a bit of blatantly forced drama where he goes cry baby mode and throws her away for her second time in 3 days ignoring her pleas. Him forcing her in place with psychic then teleporting away and HEARING her anguish making any bs about her not wanting to be with him blatantly bs. Despite knowing shes been going through heart break and stressed out and clearly just snapped at him. If she meant it she wouldnt of been pleading or in anguish.

Mr softy shouldn't been able to just ignore her balling like that and actually believe his bs. He was just being pathetic and running away because he got hurt. Every bit of a joke as Lucy's trainer who bitched off after getting knocked on his ass while trying to call her weak. Then getting brave when in public challenging him where he wont lose teeth and want being towered over pissing himself.

Hes not fricken 10 and has supposedly been studying and training, just starting the adventure or not. I cant wave off his stupidity, especially after that last bit with bonnie pissing me off.

Pretty mean, abondoning a six year old boy to a pack of wild pokemon dogs.

Look dude great story you got me hooked! But if Bonnie doesn't come back I'm a rage quit this story!