Reviews for Ill-Fated
Guest chapter 4 . 3/13/2019
There is already a Iron reales.
Nice job Mr Edge chapter 2 . 2/9/2018
This is dumb.
This could Be Sasuke, Haku, Kabuto.
People with personalities CATERED to this exact OC
But you selected Naruto
Which leads me to believe you did this on purpose so people would read FOR Naruto.
This was a waste of time.
Nice job mr edge
Welp. Regret chapter 2 . 2/9/2018
Regret giving this a chance.
From the kingsmen dog murder,
To Naruto going immediately from angry kid to edgy emo avenger.
Like..
If you are going to write a moody emo edgy kid in your story
Maybe use the emo moody edgy kid!
Not the loveable happy kid who befriends his enemies!
Naruto Is Sasuke chapter 1 . 2/9/2018
Very cliche opening.
Naruto following Sasuke's route.
the wording was nice.
Pretty wobbly start.
I'll give it a shot.
FirstThaumaturgy chapter 1 . 9/23/2017
I don't think a three year old would think about revenge
I feel that he would be more grief stricken.
sliver okami chapter 17 . 8/30/2017
Please keep writing
Guest chapter 17 . 11/4/2015
Outstanding
Seta88 chapter 2 . 7/9/2015
he is 3 break neck speed for a 3 year old is walking for every adult, he tried to pick up his mother in the last chapter he should be a meter at most and than the training from 3 to 7.
sorry i stop here the story has no logic
Rosenkruz chapter 4 . 5/6/2015
There is actually a real Metal Jutsu Kekkei Genkai in "Naruto Shippuden The Movie: Will of Fire", known as Koton, or Steel Release. It is used by Hiruko, who assimilated it into his body using his Chimera Technique.
Notsae chapter 17 . 3/17/2015
A very interesting story that contains a great deal of potential, do continue this interesting endeavor. Psychopathic Naruto is unfortunately quite rare, making this story far more intriguing.
FTDOF chapter 17 . 2/20/2015
It was a great chapter as always and I am glad to see that you are back. Thanks for breaking your hiatus and I am greatly looking forward to the next chapter. I enjoyed the SAO reference and it would be pretty cool if you made a new anime reference every chapter. But it doesn't matter too much.
Can't wait for next chapter!
young coffee god chapter 17 . 2/20/2015
I love thos story, but your negecting your other ones
Chaotic chains chapter 17 . 1/31/2015
Nice touch in the mocking of those "high class" words I understood about half of it and that pretty damn well good for a 14 year old! Oh yeah I understand completely what your talking about your one of the (un)lucky ones that have a life can't wait till update I like the depth and realism of your characters
A guy chapter 11 . 1/9/2015
Made me stop reading as soon as you mentioned Ai
Guest chapter 17 . 12/18/2014
Great story i like how it's centered around Naruto and his progress, it's an interesting naruto character that i hadn't seen before so i look forward to reading how you make him evolve. Happy holidays:)
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