alright, writing criticism real quick. “ I moved the blade a few inches back and the batarian. Who luckily for him, was quick on the uptake. Nodded silently. Wisely keeping his mouth shut.” that should all be one sentence, with commas. you’re using periods wrong. periods separate thoughts and sentences.

didint really like this chap.

hope mc teaches Shepard

Didn't read this chapter, just responding to the author comments at the beginning. The very definition of reflexes is the body responding to what you perceive. So by saying he has amazing reflexes, you're saying his body responds extremely quickly, which you then proceeded to totally ignore. And it doesn't matter if he's had zero combat training, he still has chakra flowing through his body, which is a general body enhancement even doing nothing.

...what..? "Not to mention the insane reflexes it's given me." But the very next sentence, "I had to watch my self get punched in the face...because my body couldn't keep up." What's that bullshit about? Can't imagine how many readers you've lost because of this chapter..

yeah so first who casres about old asari doing stuff that in the end is just boring backround that can be summed up as "hey look another pirate" ... what a waste of words

and second ... the "entire universe" gets destroyed ? really ? have you looked up how friggin large the universe really is ? there are more galaxys in the universe then there are planets in the milky way ... and you say that killing off all life in 1 galaxy destroys all of existence ? yeah you need to rethink that one ...

Sorry for your loss

Take care of those you can, make peace with those you can't. Good luck and get better. You will return or you won't. Either way, thanks for what you have given. It was a joy to read.

I'm not gonna insult you and say my grandma dying made me feel the same way as you did when your dad did, because no one reacts the same way to similar circumstances. That being said, I feel like you can get through this, you may be depressed for awhile but never let it interfere with real life like i did.

having chakra alone give you so massive boost that you can explain what you want and use your stupid logic5 y old' but you fucked this chapter and everyone with iq above ape tell you that he couldn't lose but you didn't know how to pair Shepard with him and that's how this 1/10 chapter was made I hope you don't make so weak chapters anymore.

You have my condolences. I don’t know your father, but I’m sure he was a good man. Moving on isn’t gonna be easy, you’ll be in a dark spot for a while. It’s gonna be tough, but I’m sure you’ll pull through. It’s what he would have wanted.

Please fix the 'i's'. I know it seems minor, but it screams "I don't care about my story enough to make it look presentable" which turns a lot of people off.

Sorry for your loss.

Thanks for the heads up about this story.

the pain doesn't fade but with time you can learn to accept it. prayers with you

My condolences, take your time to mourn and center yourself.