Ahhh god, just after reading just Harucchi and Zono's parts, I love this! The one-on-ones showed different levels of tension between Miyuki and the other characters, and shows how comfortable he is with different members of his team, and seeing them all turn red was fun!

And then Sawamura comes in with the angst. They're real with each other (not to say that's not the case with the others), because they don't restrain themselves in front of each other, and if there's any walls they may have put up, it all falls when they're faced with one another. When the tears start falling I just start to melt in my chair...and did I mention I LOVE WARM HUGSS!

That was short and bittersweet, a wonderful read!

Awwww... Eijun get a hug and let Miyuki hold him. Also Miyuki still want Eijun to visit! X)) awww

I Love how Kuramochi said Miyuki going to his new kickback while Eijun get holiday from it. Lol

I Love it!

mah heart mah soul

This was great! But sad. Miyuki isn't supposed to ever get hurt.

Wonderful story!

PLEASSSEEE IM BEGGING YOU! PLEASE DO ONE OF THE THIRDS YEARS COMING TO SEE MIYUKI!

So... So sweet

but, to think miyuki get injuried that was just freak me out...

miyuki baka... Why you not just kiss bakamura, he'll willingly accept it...

Thanks for writing this. ;u; I liked it very much! I think you portrayed everyone very well. So glad you wrote Eijun calling Kazuya 'Miyuki-senpai' haha, a lot of people don't seem to do that even though he calls him that in the manga. w

Thanks. This killed me. ..Just thanks.

Yes. Good. Rated five hearts.

Wow this was really cute! And they seemed in character too!

This one was very heartwarming.

I loved how the interactions between Miyuki and his teammates were all different, and how Eijun was the last one. I was actually going "aww" (low-pitched) and "aww" (high-pitched) through-out the one-shot. It was very - heartwarming, for lack of a better word - to see how his teammates cared for him, even when he thought no one did.

I also liked how you portrayed the characters, they were all spot on. And Eijun's conversation with Miyuki - and his line!

"I was there. On the mound. I was - I was watching you the whole time. Everyone else on the team knew - so why didn't I know you were hurt, when I was the one closest to you on the field?"

Damn, that must've pulled a lot of heartstrings.

And the hug in the end too! Just. Damn.

Good job, man. The pacing, the tone, the mood - they're all really good.

Thank you for participating in the first challenge of The Writing Game, and I hope you join in on the next one too!

DFKJAFKJDSFA thi was so cute and also angsty. loved it!

So what happened to Miyuki? He collapsed and now needs surgery? It was well written though, and as much as I'm not very familiar with the new first string players, the ones I do know you wrote very well :)

I can't remember if I have mentioned this in before in my previous reviews of your stories; but what I really enjoy about your writing style is how you make it so easy to visualize.

I like the imagined background story of Miyuki which I again is not hard to see play out in my minds eye given how the latest anime episode went.

I love the ambiguous phrasing and phasing on the last part. It would work any way you want to squint.

It was a very nice read.