Me encantaba U.U

more chapters or rewrite the store please

Holy fuck, that’s not what I expected.

wow, you made the uzumaki really really weak. where are those old timers that can use the chains. what happened to the previous kage. where are the summons. where are the seals touted as the best. the seals used here seems to be the same as d rank jutsus. and the new kage is so weak, he gets fcked by a single competent jounin. and he had no trump cards, i think he failed as a shinobi. you honestly wrote them to be at a chunin or lowest jounin rank. shit seals, shit jutsus, shit fighting, shit everything

wasnt root made by tobirama?

wrong thigh. thai is the nationality. thigh is the leg part

Personally I prefer this one over the rewrite and it would have been awesome to see it continued. But its your decision. Also i don't think this fan fic of yours is in anyway inferior to any of the other fanfics you have written.

It's a shame you felt this story wasn't good enough. I thought it was doing fairly well, and I loved the adorable hints at a Shirou x Mei couple. One who trusts too easily tempered with someone who doesn't trust easily. Not to mention the ironic symbolism of steel and fire between them, lava notwithstanding. Then there was the fire and ice rivalry between her and the siblings, even if that was mostly Mei being insecure over the exceptionally feminine boy of the team.

Honestly I prefer this one over the remake version. I mean both have some good qualities, but overall this one seems better. Plus Danzo isn't as much of a dick in this one than in the other one

no cliffhager ending

it would be cool if he used the same tecnique to make clone Heracles or Cu Chulainn

ah so it was her

would have been cool if she was Terumi Mei

Is there no Gaia's Will here to target magic...if so then his magecraft would be much more powerful

Honestly, I think that this one had a lot of potential. I know you wanted to reboot it, but this one to me was fairly interesting.

I do like how the age differences between Kushina and Shirou are drastically reduced in the reboot, and I think thats pretty important because I really do like the thought of Shirou being able to be a gate-keeper for Kushina later on down the line. The thought of Shirou, the younger brother, being an imposing big brother figure for Kushina is something that highly amuses me, especially when it comes to the uppity brat that is Minato Namikaze. (I mean seriously, the guy does nothing the whole time Kushina is being bullied, and then shows up at the last second and steals her heart? Come on! lol)

That and there is the whole "Perfectly Cloned Insert-Name-Here" Shadow Clone that bleeds. There is SO MUCH that I love about that idea. I could imagine Shirou non-chalantly blowing off his guardian shinobi... "Geeze, if I wanted to be nagged to death I'd just make a clone of you and let them have at it."

I think that it would be an excellent addition to your reboot! Please include it!