Tbh, most of your work has nothing to do with the naruto universe in that none of your characters are ever in character. Your characters only share the name of characters from naruto in the name of being a fanfiction and love of naruto rather than being based and inspired by the series.
Your quality of writing is high so if you swapped the names, you could have a sellable novel. (Personally it feels like an extreme slice of life and slow paced with the details and not enough moments between the main pairing. It doesnt hook me and make me excited to read on. Rather i was skimming to look for something to hook me and make me fall in love with reading and want more. The other characters tend to drone on and on making me lose interest but thats just me since i tend to not like that sort of background noise.

Y'know, I never thought I'd see a Naruto fanfic set in Missouri. And even if I did, there's no way I'd have expected it to be *that* good.

Thanks for writing this!

Ah, perfect first meeting!

Good, I hope Hinata doesn't bend under her father's pressure. And I can't wait for SasuHina's next meeting

a trained relationship with her father... I feel bad for Hanabi but I hope Hinata defends her little freedom she had won outside of her father's clutches.

Your bringing up more characters into the story is very smooth. First encounter has me excited... but you cut it so short ... makes me anticipate the next one more

I llove how an author is creating an outline story about an author in authors block. Its so interesting to read...

Author Sasuke needing inspiration.. usually it comes from the outside world or things that happen in your daily life. Can't wait to see...

Oh, I am always excited about reading well written SasuHina story. Nice setting up of the main characters.. can't wait to see how they entangle themselves together.

Mogami Setsu and Tsuruga Kuon? I love you, that's my second favorite Manga, I lost it when I realised the connection hahahahha

the ending was so sweet. I like how you wrote sasuke as shy and bullied as a child because usually he written as this cool and assured type of guy in fics

Hehe interesting to see sasuke even more socially awkward than hinata

But who microwaves bacon?

Well written. Yet dull and boring. Won't be able to finish reading it... Why even bother calling the main character 'Uchiha Sasuke' when this is clearly just an OC? I don't mind a shy, antisocial Sasuke(in fact, I'd even like an introverted Sasuke, if done well enough), but you could've at least given him a colder personality. Certainly his life experiences would've made him jaded and more detached. You butchered Sasuke so badly... This doesn't even feel like sasuhina for that reason. The main thing that attracted me to sasuhina was the BadBoy - GoodGirl interactions, dynamic and painful romance. But it's obvious Sasuke isn't a BadBoy in this story. Your Sasuke-that-smiles-all-the-time-and-loves-children is so very cliché and boring... I wonder why authors can never get Sasukes' personality right... He's either a smiling pleasant person, some guilt-ridden weakling or a superficial manwhore with no depth. Sometimes even a mixture of those... None of which fit well. Perhaps I'm the problem, since your Sasuke doesn't seem to bother other people as much as it bothers me. But I felt as though my review was warranted, given you obviously put in effort in this story and as previously stated, you write well. I just dislike what you wrote. I'm a blunt person, sorry if you took offense to anything I said. Perhaps you'll like a different perspective. Or not. Either way, cyao.

So if she hates horror movies she's going to turn down the movie premiere to Head Shot ?