Reviews for Getaway
XxGambol Shroudxx chapter 1 . 6/29/2018
This was fucking magical
athrunzala chapter 1 . 11/6/2015
Nervous Sun is a nice change. I would keep reading if there were more chapters to this.
CVLTheDragonSlayer chapter 1 . 10/10/2015
...I know where this is going.
Kellrock chapter 1 . 8/1/2015
I loved this fic! I thought you did a great job with the characters! I can't believe people would give you issues with them kissing, like you said it's in the description! And personally I've read a few great Blake/Sun Fifa recently but what I've notives is in my opinion people make Blake a little too cold and distant. Blake is a teenage girl why shouldn't she kiss Sun?! Anyway I thought you did a great job
RobotFish chapter 1 . 4/12/2015
First of all, let me say that this was a well-written fic and you've done a spectacular job with it. You do a great job conveying the story and dialogue in a concise and entertaining manner.

I don't know what it is, but I feel like many writers struggle to write Blake and Sun precisely. Judging by this fic, you are one of the ones who can do it right. I never felt either go OOC from beginning to end. In my mind, the ultimate test of the quality of a character portrayal is if I am able to hear that character's voice and see their actions in my head. I was able to do both here, so major kudos for that.

Something I very much enjoy about your writing style is the focus on the action. What I mean is that the meat of the story (the character's actions, dialogue, etc) is not bogged down by lots of flashback and introspection. You have enough of both to add flavor, but not to the point where I have to sift through two paragraphs of it just to get to the next line of dialogue. Stick with it, your pacing is on point.

This being said, my one piece of constructive criticism is that I would like to see a little more setup/background at the very beginning of the story. Granted, it's not a far stretch why Blake is allowing Sun to make her happy, but I'd love to see some of the events and feelings leading up to her decision to lower her walls and let him in.

Now, I have to take a minute to address what I believe to be less than helpful reviews and criticism you apparently have received for this story. Frankly, I think it's ridiculous that other writers are nitpicking the way you portray Sun and Blake's relationship, especially on a site for fanfiction and especially when it's clear they support a conflicting ship. Criticizing a story for being canonically inaccurate based on one's own interpretation of source material is just plain judgmental. Please don't let the pompous nay-sayers discourage you from writing. You have talent and you deserve to be praised for it.

Overall, bravo. BlackSun does not get nearly enough love, and you've done a splendid job contributing to the fanfiction community.
Kuroiikawa chapter 1 . 10/30/2014
Forget all the non-Sun/Blake shippers out there, this fic was great. Thanks for the great read and keep up the good work!
Elen chapter 1 . 10/25/2014
This is cute! Their interactions are sweet and I love the way you wrote them. I could see Blake getting carried away like this once she decides to give in. She really needed something to make her completely forget about all that stress she was feeling for a bit. I really like that you had Sun ask her for permission, that seemed ic and was nice. I don't get why you have all these reviews complaining that there's kissing between these two when it clearly states it's a fic of these two as a pair and it's a romance. Or complaining that you don't mention yang? Jfc, it's a cute story and you deserve less ridiculous reviews.
LuckyBullet chapter 1 . 9/29/2014
I feel like an extra few hundreds words should've existed with Blake and Sun just talking as friends. SHOW ME that Sun can make Blake laugh and smile and forget, which you really didn't. I can claim that Ren can make Weiss laugh and smile and forget and use that as justification for Weiss kissing him but do you have any evidence that Sun actually can (the canon dance scene also didn't actually show the chemistry, just kind of said it was there).

Also I have a feeling Blake and Yang were doing very much the same thing. I feel like you could've mentioned how Yang was fun, but she enjoyed being with Sun more, something so you aren't ignoring the evident connection between her and Yang (romantic or friendly there is a connection there and she seemed to be enjoying herself before Yang stepped aside for Sun, and I feel like Blake did smile both in the dorm room after inevitable compliments from Ruby, Weiss and Yang and whilst dancing with Yang). It would've been nice to have seen someone actually write the connection that's theoretically there.

I like how you had him stumbling over his words, for some reason people always write Sun as this cool, suave ladykiller when he's not. So yeah it's nice to see him mess up the compliment. I get the feeling though that, rather than blushing, Blake would actually giggle. Rather than get flustered by Sun's compliment, she'd be amused by Sun's unintentional humour.

I like how you included the part about the distraction and, to me, it seems like, tomorrow, Blake won't commit, regardless of what else happened that night. It might happen in the future, but Eclipse wouldn't officially be canonised at that moment. That's what I take from her reactions in this.

With regards to her longing for him, I feel like the right time for her to have gotten flustered was when his lips were mere centimeters from hers. She wouldn't have flushed until she had already subconsciously chosen to kiss him (by not moving away from him when he leant in). His personality endears her all night, then when leans in for the kiss, she gets reminded that she is actually interested in him physically and that earns a blush as this buried urge to kiss him builds up.

His asking for permission was nice, a perfect way of letting an actual connection develop without betraying Blake's character. And then her kind of... carnal lust for Sun after that kiss is what leads to the makeout session as she realises that she wants Sun but can't have Sun because she needs to be focussed on Torchwick. Then she remembers Weiss' words "And once it's all over, we'll return for our search!" The key phrase there being "once it's all over". Blake wasn't searching for Roman tonight, she wasn't needing to focus, she was relaxing, for one night. She could have Sun for that one night, and so she made out with him, and scurried into the night to enjoy it with him before things had to return to normal, and she had to focus on Torchwick.

So, as far as Eclipse fics go it's... not bad. I feel like more of Blake's thought processes could be apparent, and that you placed the blushing at the wrong place (though that's a minor detail coming from a writer's perspective) and I feel like there should have been more platonic banter between the two in the first half of the fic but this avoids most of the crimes against romance, Blake's character and Sun' character that every other Eclipse fic I've tried to read have committed, so well done for that. Not too shabby.
Winter Coma chapter 1 . 9/25/2014
Hmm. Personally I think Blake would reject the kiss because of all the stuff happening with the White Fang and leave any budding feelings for Sun on the wayside, at least until she had her affairs in order. Nevertheless, both characters are very in-character, which is always good, and, well, this is a very well-written, adorable oneshot. Good job.
Craxuan chapter 1 . 9/25/2014
Canonically speaking, I believe Blake would reject the kiss because she wasn't sure of her own feelings yet, and she has stuff to obsess about. She's very insecure in her own way, and doesn't want to be distracted from things she thought are more important. Further down the road, if they continue to develop their feelings then yes, it is possible.

But pretty in character in mind opinion. Very good job.