I was really excited to read this, I originally found it because it was on my favorite author's page and I can't wait to read more of your works in the future

"came out his strongest Pokemon in his roster, Charizard"
kouga kouga

A year long hiatus. Really

Plz update! The story is very good, and c'mon its 2016!

please you need to update iiiiitttttt !

Awww its on hiatus :( I don't care if the plot is rubbish this story is awesome :)

I've only read the first few paragraphs and it's hooking me into the story. It's really unique and I hope to see more of it.

Please update this is really good and I thought that Ash was ij the cage. how did May get there?

Hey i also wanted to say that as u have given ash lucario then plz give it a mega evolve state in the nxt is jzt a suggestion if u don't want then don't do it and plz post the nxt one as fast as could.:-D

Ur fan fic is amazing keep on writing and i'm really waiting for the nxt chap

i love this fan fic and support you on the armourshipping side as i think it is absolutely brilliant and i hope all the people who are irritating you on this subject should go to hell and stop reading this fan fic.

Hey there. First off all I'd like to congratulate you for this fanfic. It has been really interesting and coming from a guy that doesn't read much, it has really caught my interest. So great job man. However this may be minor and all, but you still haven't clearly addressed in the story about how Ash and Serena's mannerisms have changed towards each other after that night. In fact, by the looks of it, it seems that they both may have forgotten about the night and are still acting like normal friends, as if what happened that night never happened. So if possible, it would be nice if you could address that matter even more. Other than that great job good sir. I'm most definitely looking forward to read the rest of your fanfiction :) . Good luck!

I think giving ash a dragonite was unecessary since ash has a equally strong charizard.

Hey there. I just wanna say that GREAT job on your fanfiction. I gotta admit, I'm not much of a reader, but fanfictions like these are what got me into reading to begin with so hats off to you good sir! And as far as the chapter goes it was well written. However I feel as if I wanna address a minor fault in this chapter while it still is nothing big. I mean isn't Ash and Serena's mannerisms towards each other supposed to change after that night? I mean that topic has never been brought up in this chapter and their interactions towards each other are still friend like, almost giving the vibe that they've forgotten about what happened that night or it never happened as a whole, since in my opinion, they're acting like causal friends. While yes, this fault may have nothing to do with the main plot, it still is nice to point out the noticable changes with each character and their behavior with each other, especially after something as big as sleeping in each other's arms, let alone kissing someone's cheek wouldn't you agree? Anyways great job man! Glad that the hiatus is over and I'm looking forward to reading the rest of your fanfiction [:

Aunque esto tiene pinta de ser una historia AshxSerena, a mi me encantaria que fuera una historia AshxMay. Muy bueno. Actualiza pronto por fa.