I don't like the bold dialogue at all...Can you go back and change that? Anybody who is any good at reading should be able to keep track of who's saying what, if that makes any sense.

please update

I like this story very much! I like how Syandara personality can sometimes be funny and sometimes be dead serious. PLEASE UPDATE! :D

I'm enjoying the story you made as you try to keep the balance of the cannon story and your oc's original story without affect the original. Good luck continuing your work. I will PM my OC if it's okay.

Black boots that go to mid calf, slightly baggy black pants, short sleeve black shirt, black gloves that have no fingers, and a black long cloak

Sorry that I forgot to put the outfit it completely sliped my mind, and also sorry that you have to go to a diffrent chapter just to read my fixed mistake

IRL: Chiyu Tsuki
IGN: Chi Okami
Gender: Female
Weapon of choice: Duel blade katanas
Role: Swordsman
Appearance: Knee length Crimson red hair, pale skin, height is 5'11, weighs 104 pounds
Hair color: Crimson red
Eye color: left is yellow, right is purple
Personality: Emotionless but cares about others, will do anything to protect her friends, only talks when it's needed

(Please ignore the one the days it's from Savannah I accidentally hit the send button by mistake before I created this account, I'm really sorry about that.)

IRL name:
IGN: Chi Okami
Gender: Female
Weapon of choice: Duel blade katanas
Role;

You are doing really well with this story I hope it's something you continue for a while

I enjoyd reading this story. I hope you update more. You're the first person to make me able to read a sword art online fanfic. Keep up the great work!

I like your writing style, and your grammar and spelling seem on point. The details could use some work, but your word choice is well executed. I also like how you made Syandara a "weak" beta-tester, compared to so many SAO stories that have the protagonist be a super powerful character, or turn into a Kirito leveled player. So, well done my friend.

My only complaint would be the pacing. You went rather fast with the story. I would've suggested to show us a little bit more about Syandara before the game started. Also, you switched scenery very fast. One moment we're in the town, and in just a couple sentences we're in the boar fields, and then we quickly move to Kayaba's speech. Take your time, don't be afraid to slowly progress. Other than those little quirks, keep it up!