Oh, nice spin on the plot. I like it.

Hey buddy! I am SO SORRY for not getting to this story sooner! But, as you already know, real life has been having me go non-stop for quite some time. Regardless, I’m here so let’s get this bad boy started! :)

Firstly, let me say something about your overall writing style. YOU’RE SO AWESOME AT DESCRIPTIVE WRITING! Seriously, my mind is BLOWN wide open by how you describe Columbia from Elizabeth’s tower! Why you didn’t ever pull out these particular writing chops while writing your Total Drama story is beyond me!?

Regardless, it is truly delightful to read how you characterize the landmarks (or maybe skymarks?) of Columbia. Its honestly so hard for me to pick one or two in particular to show that I’m not just talking out of my backside when I say this. I think I’ll go with the buildings of the city moving about like men and women in a dance, the blimps being like butlers and servants to those lord and lady buildings, how Elizabeth creates the tears, and presence of Songbird. All of these and others show your great skill! :)

Moving on, let’s talk about Elizabeth herself. You stress Elizabeth’s feeling of isolation way more than the game did…and I’m grateful for that change. While Elizabeth was in my opinion one of the best parts of Bioshock: Infinite, I will admit that it would have been more realistic for her to be more prone to depression.

And of course, where there is Elizabeth there must be Booker. And damn, he made quite the entrance, didn’t he? ;) But in all seriousness, you’ve gotten his chemistry with Elizabeth down pretty good. Her joke was funny and his reaction was great.

So, can I assume that it’s the Vox that are trying to destroy Elizabeth and her tower?

Also, another good job with Elizabeth’s comment about this maybe being a dream, and Booker’s comment, and their exchange of “thank you” and “your welcome”.

Great job with the disturbing corpse and Elizabeth’s comments about how she’s free but surrounded by the smell of corpses and her feeling happiness over the man’s death.

I’m confused about something. Next did Elizabeth see: Booker after he killed a bunch of people in Colombia, him at Wounded Knee, or Comstock at Wounded Knee?

Also, in this version does Booker have allies to help him break out Elizabeth?

Oh…so Booker is giving Elizabeth over to Comstock, eh? Interesting, very interesting. :)

Anyway, once again, I’m SO SORRY for not getting to this story sooner. I really enjoyed this and I look forward to seeing what other twists and turns are to come.

Until the next chapter, please keep up the good work! :)