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I like to see male human x female superior your story's are my favourite

i always like your story's

Another good one-shot you have got talent keep writing one day you can be a published author if you put your mind to it.

Good prequel to your other story.

Are you gonna do one with James/Corona next? I would like to see that.

All I can say is that you crafted a wonderful story here. Nothing more, nothing less.