I just finished playing mystic square. And this is just how i imagined!
Great job Zap!

I hope you reintroduce Makai in your story.

It makes sense since ZUN hasn't had them around since the 98' Era.

its very good it actually made me tear up it also explained their color change

You know, Yuki and Mai's deaths would be the sort of thing most JRPGs would consider 'Ohh, that character is still alive.' ...Sorry. Been reading a JRPG LP that does everything right, so everyone commented on expected troupes, so I kind of have them still on my mind. Anyways, you did a very good job of handling this, Zap. I like how you handled the changes of color, making Alice do it with her new-found powers. You tied up the loose ends nicely. I honestly have no idea how to go about the whole color change business, myself. I'll need to cross that bridge when I come to it. Already know how to deal with Marisa's change, as I'm sure you could figure out just by what little I've written.