The ending of the chapter makes you wonder what's really going on.

Black Swordsman, indeed. I wonder what happened to him.

So Kirito ended up as orange player, all because he tried to help Klein? No good deed comes unpunished.

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Was absolutely fuckin great to be honest
The emotions
Descriptions
Writings
Mystery
The journals
The fighting scenes
And aaaa
Klien :((((
Argo :(((
Kirito :(((
Sinon :((((
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:(((((((
I feel bad for Klien
Feels bad for kirito and all of his trauma
Sinon and Argo are not with Kirito in a relationship:(((
All are suffering:(((
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This story is amazing
I love it
Do take it easy tho, the pains are oof

Keep it up man! Love it

It's been a year since you updated you promised you promised !~!

Yeah...Kirito's kinda OP...

Wait, so the players don't lose their avatars like in the original?

Full esgelord Kirito. Can't say I like or dislike it. Overall, pretty okay. But a sword in a gunfight? At least give him a pistol or something...

It's so spectacular! This's the story of the GGO Death Game that I've always dreamed of! Where have I been these years?

The 17 chapters have gone as smoothly as noodles as if they were a unity. Your actions are detailed but easy to read. There are many people who praise you for characters development and I totally agree. But what impressed me most was the atmosphere of the story. The general atmosphere was heavy as if to submerge it all, but there were still moments of lightening the day properly intertwined; and the way the story was getting darker and darker and finally totally black after BoB was told so ingenious and natural. I can't even think of any words to appreciate you properly.

However, I have read in the comment section and have been suggested to write something that can help you improve. Yes, I see something that hasn't been pointed out yet.

First, in chapter 8, in Solomon's dungeon, you are constantly jumping POVs between NPC soldiers and players. However, NPCs' POVs are not as detailed and good as those of the players and serve no purpose except to inform the reader that these NPCs have feelings. Completely changing to the POV of players will hardly change the story at all. However, instead, you can take advantage of this. You can tell a more detailed background story about them, like what was written in the diary in the previous chapter. You can say this diary is part 1 and the reminiscence by these soldiers is part 2 of the legend of the dungeon, which I and perhaps others have been very curious but still have no satisfactory explanation. We want a more concrete view of them.

The next is the sense of frustration after the end of BoB at the beginning of chapter 13. Perhaps the problem there was because the POVs there were a little personal, but readers wanted a more holistic view after the end of a major event (read: massacre) like that. This idea comes from the Hunger Game and the survival movies I've watched. You only need to add the numbers after Argo's letter. BoB killed so many people, how many shots were fired, what was the overall situation after BoB, ... things like that. Thus the reader can have a general view of the situation after BoB before going into details in the following chapters and finally feeling a satisfactory end to the event. (I have a feeling that I was shot in the heart when Rei died, and panicked when Sinon started to lose control.)

In the end, this is just a personal opinion, but the surname Kanna is too feminine for your Argo, but if you use it for its own purpose, that's okay.

Thank you for reading my first detailed analysis. My level of English and expertise's still low, so please forgive the errors.

Holy shit, I mean good god. I can't say I have ever read anything as good as this in terms of fanfiction. I mean the way you develop the characters and develop their personalities is astounding. I only started reading this story recently after having it favorited for quite some time, because of my recent dive back into SAO. I was astounded with the level of writing I found when reading this and I quickly devoured my way through all 17 chapters. I beg of you. Please for the love of all that is holy continue writing this masterpiece of a story. I can't even begin to imagine what you have in store for the rest of the story. Best wishes with all in your life.

God, this is a truly incredible story. I came back to reread it just now (as I have done multiple times in the past) and I've once again fallen in love with it. I absolutely understand if you're unable to continue it for personal reasons, but if it is at all possible, please do write more! I, and many others I'm sure, continue to love and care about this world and these characters you've created, and would love to see more, no matter how long the wait. And, even if you choose not to continue, thank you for creating this story.

Best wishes and happy holidays.

It is called bullet of bullets as a reference to the NES game King of Kings. Only OG gamers remember that.

This was a amazing story so far i'm not if you will ever see this review but i do hope you come to finish this piece of work you have here.

As an author myself, you don't realise how long it's been since you've updated unless you remind yourself or finally check how long it's been. So, disregarding the wait, it's good to see you back!
I won't touch on your personal reasons and your apology; I don't see it as necessary. Everyone has their own motivations for writing on here, and did I mention how glad I am that you're back?
- Aside from that, I'll need to reread this story because HOLY hell it's been a while. To be completely honest with you, I didnt even know this was updated until today because my emails suck. So, for probably the 4th/5th time, I shall enjoy this story to its fullest.
-Regarding your writing skills, I don't think they've diminished in the slightest. We essentially use writing skills all our lives, so once you progress as a writer, I believe you stay at that , STOP TUGGING ON MY HEARTSTRINGS MAN! Just wanna see my fav OTP finally together.
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