Good story, I loved it, greetings, congratulations on your fic, bye!

This reads as a script for a bootleg version of the anime, not as an actual fan fiction. There are story telling and visual tropes that just do not translate over from anime to writing. "Anime tears" and "sweat drops" chief among them.

dude dude dudedude that was great but sad

You really need to proofread this

Why is Kagura such a bitch? She won't 4ven let him eat or drink.. that is extremely messed up... Shows just how much she cares..

Why did you make Natsu weak? Any test they have should be a cake walk compared to Fairy Tail. They are cute together though.

not bad but the story is a ess

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This story is a mess. Crazy one upping mess. But it was funny at times.

i wish the epilogue was a whole chapter instead cause i kind of want to know what happen to the fairy tail guild

Kinda stupid that a love hotel doesnt have soundproof walls

Battle Montages... greeeeat... not really.
There is only one time I enjoy reading battle montages and that's when reading manga.
Sorry to be a buzzkill and all.

- Eldart

I don't mind training montages but I don't need them... good chapter, nice bit of humor over the sibling thing but whatever... I hope you will clarify in the next chapter whether Kagura and Natsu are married because I am slightly confused.

- Eldart

I like Wendy having Lightning powers instead of Natsu because it makes more sense.
Lightning comes from the Sky and Wendy is a Sky Dragonslayer, so I think it makes more sense.
I think three of the seven should have two elements that they receive from three other dragonslayers.
Natsu Fire/Light
Gajeel Iron/Shadow (Yes, I know this one exists but it makes sense)
Wendy Sky/Lightning

The other four can go stuff themselves because they have Lacrimas in them... and if you're wondering why I haven't mentioned God Serana (For those kiddos who read reviews and only watch the anime God Serana is Number One of the Ten Wizard Saints and has eight Dragonslayer Lacrima's in him) that's because God Serana is total fodder.

- Eldart

Drag out who? Oh wait... perhaps you meant 'Drag out' as in 'Draagon Out'? Haha I knew what you meant.
I do not believe the chapter was rushed... roughly 3000 thousand words, written well and sets the story just right, so don't worry you're a great writer and I look forward to the next... 22 CHAPTERS! I suppose this was first published 2 years ago... speaking of which... will you even see this?

- Eldart