I know it's an old story but this chapter has the characters so different than the story up to know. Elsa swears she won't drink and yet doesn't even say anything when Kristoff wants her in the drinking game. Both Elsa and Anna talk about waiting to have sex when they feel it's right and want it to be very romantic. But they end up just drunk fucking like something someone like Hans would do. I don't know why, but this chapter has really put me off on this story, and I have been really into it so far. Even with thousands of spelling and grammar errors I loved it. But know it's like I can't even stand to read them anymore. I hope to be able to finish it later, but this chapter has like the main characters 180 degrees different from their norm. I will try later.

Un Hermoso Final!
Mil Gracias Por Este Maravilloso Proyecto!

first paragraph and love how you included how the cold doesn't bother her

This story goes from over the top to unbelievable. I feel like you haven't done any research on most of what goes into the story.

As a multimedia arts undergrad and my best friend being a graduate in animation, I can tell you that being good at illustrations will not get you work at an animation studio. That's like saying you're a chef expert on French cuisine being put in a five star sushi place. You're still a chef but that's not what you mastered.

I tried to like this story. I really did. But this is it for me I think. I'd love to read it if it gets rewritten. Hopefully, you've gotten better at writing and fleshing out stories and my criticism will help you improve even more.

That was honestly a pretty weak reason for not letting anyone in. I honestly thought it had more to do with Elsa being tricked into a relationship and bullied afterwards with her brother getting caught in it as well.

So far, the writing has been pretty shallow, predictable, and grammatical errors are aplenty. I honest to god hope this improves the longer this story progresses. Also, I cringe really badly when you say Elsa's car. It's a Camaro. Not a Cameo.

Okay, does Elsa not have anything else besides flannel shirts and wife beaters? There are literally loads of other clothing options to choose from other than those. A variety of jackets, boots, canvas shoes, sneakers, running shoes, shorts, chinos, etc.

Another thing, as a huge car guy, it makes me cringe how every other person has a super expensive classic like it's going out of style. I can understand rich boy Hans with his new Mustang. But Elsa with a Camaro (I'm gonna guess it's a Yenko) and Al with a Mustang (Probably a 69)? I mean come on. You don't even have to limit yourself to muscle cars and you'd be solidifying the rift between Hans and co. I get that in Elsa's case, it was to make something common for her and Anna's dad. But there are loads more options than that and I honestly think a Thunderbird suits her more than a Camaro does.

Also the car mods made me lol. Could have said it had a supercharger or a turbocharger instead of NAWS. Bigger, fatter tires with beaded rims and a mean stance. Murdered out with ghost stripes and a clip on vented hood. Missing one light for a discreet air vent. See, that wasn't so hard. And now we know that car is legit a beast.

Please consider rewriting. I want to like this story and I know it was written a few years back but this story deserves it I think.

Well, after spending over two weeks reading a book of a length I comfortably finish in a day, I feel compelled to leave a review...

This story is horribly written, not a single paragraph is free of a mistake of some description. Most commonly is that of incorrect tenses, which makes this story incredibly frustrating to read through!

The story lacked consistency or thought, with various plot points and characters contradicting or rehashing what was previously written.

The overall plot was decent, but certainly not worth the headache brought on by attempting to interpret what the author actually meant.

The ending was also exceptionally lack lustre and didn’t tie anything together, leaving many things left unsaid!

I suggest steering clear of this story, unless like myself, you have already read all the really good Elsanna stories out there!

daaaaaaawwwwww they are so cute especially Olaf not to mention he's really sweet too W

you definitely need to work on your word tenses and start using commas.

I really loved the story. Couldn't stop reading until I finish it

Dddaaàwwwwwwww!

So much of this chapter doesn't make sense. The story clearly states that Elsa doesn't have to work because her family members are paying some of her bills and willing to make sure she's taken care of. But in the same paragraph, it says Elsa is working to make the ends meet. Those two things are mutually exclusive.

Later on, it says Elsa argued with her boss to get him to give her a car. Almost immediately afterwards, it says she tried to keep him from giving it to her.

Near the end of the chapter, Elsa says that she has heard Anna is 'really sweet, energetic and sweet to everyone that she meets'. In the next sentence, Elsa says that she "wouldn't know" that Anna is the Arendelle's Sweetheart. Those two statements are, again, mutually exclusive.

Also, Elsa describes Hans as a giant douchebag with ridiculous sideburns and a hypocrite. Immediately afterwards, she says that she doesn't think she's better than anyone. So...she thinks of herself as equal to a hypocritical douchebag?

This entire story is likely filled with nonsensical statements and just bad writing. I recommend passing over it entirely.

One of the beautifulest fics I've read. They both have great kind hearts . ~PenguinVuelve

Hate to tell u but Elsa losing her parents has nothing to do with why she won't date anna. And the boxing thing was just sprung on us. The grammar could use a bit of fixing too.

Can't someone re-write this fic and correct the mistakes? please? someone take over.