Break up your paragraphs, because no one wants to read huge blocks of text but the desperate.

Comma before introducing a tag (“she said”), and the same when introducing a quotation after a tag. Use periods anywhere else.

Don’t use quotations inside quotations; use apostrophes inside quotations and quotations inside apostrophes.

Your grammar is all over the place and you could learn something from the earlier chapters; they’re grammatically correct and CONSISTENT. Clean it up.

I’m not going to read this anymore, but hope this helped someone. Cheers.

In a few chapters, the opening I’ll be reading will be “Hiccup Haddock was fucking Astrid Hofferson,” won’t it? Sheesh.

A bit of creativity in the formatting wouldn’t hurt, really. Just a tip.

GIMME A TOOTHLESS

This story had potential, but honestly, there was such a gigantic gap in quality from this point onwards that it's hard to keep reading.

The paragraphs are large blocks of text that don't respect rules of Dialogue and theme, the typos and wrong vocabulary is grating, and the sudden turn-around for the characters is a bit appalling.

I mean, it's easy to say that Astrid's dad is the cause of Astrid being maladjusted, but that doesn't excuse her from the abuse she has done herself. Abuse is abuse. Adding in the handicaps just makes it worse.

Astrid justifying for herself that the reason why she's a bully is because she is being abused reeks of indulgent self-gratification. Acting out happens subconsciously. You don't sayHey, I was raped, so now I also torment and abuse others. I know it's wrong but I'll keep doing it anyway." In reality, once someone is cognizant of what they're doing, they'll try to stop it or excuse it. And it might not work-people would feel helpless because they realize they're subconsciously furthering the cycle of violence. But people don't outright recognize what they're doing and just continue on doing it. The ones who do are outright irredeemable.

Anyway, please don't take this as a flame. I genuinely wanted to like this story. But it was already a bit rough going in by making astird such a bitch, and the drop in actual writing quality made the juice not worth the squeeze anymore.

I actually HAVE that bumper sticker, "Meddle not in the affairs of dragons, for ye are crunchy and go good with ketchup" as a shirt! Also, this story is epic!

Doctor: The surgery was a success! But he may feel some side effects of the pain killers and drugs we gave him
Mom: Like what?
Me *half drunk* GiVE me mY GuarD Hiccup!

You my friend summed it up perfectly. Being able to sniff the air better then the others isn't enough of a trait to form a class with only two dragons in it, especially since those two have enough other traits for them to stay in their own perfect places.

The whole class system messed up right now. Removal of the fear class, leaving all multi headed dragons in the dust. Then putting the fear symbol on the tracker class. And leaving the sharp symbol the same despite moving the nadder.

Oh, and great story by the way.

If Hiccup's gonna be completely deaf by the end of high school, has he been taking sign language lessons and/or meeting with hearing impaired people?

Well when people have hearing problems (like me) course we kinda need hearing aids what do you expect

I liked the plot and general concept of this story, however at times the grammar mistakes and gigantic paragraphs made it almost unreadable for me. Great job otherwise though.

I like a lot this end is absolutely so good and Happy New Year

Great job with this story is there going to be a sequel?

This story gave me so many feels. Amazing from start to finish.

Well damn.
its finally done eh?

Quite the ending you gave us bud. And thus ends another good story of Hiccstrid. And I love it.
The future is far from smooth sailing, but this us what they both would rather have, weird and unlikely as it is.
Hiccstrid!

We never did get to hear what was in the diary did we? Or have I just forgotten