This has made me cry... I lived the story line. Brilliant.

Only just read this chapter! Again very well done. Clever how the refrain of snips and chops is reused to betoken something much more sinister than in the first chapter.

great story!

First off, Happy Birthday Ana!

Second, I didn't see any SPaG in this piece, or any of your others that I've read, so Kudos for that.

Third, this has got to be my favorite of all your stories because it's so light and fluffy and brotherly love here and then all angsty in the next chapter. I particularly like the line "Remus Lupin is my brother. Lily Evans is a new member of our family. James loves her so I love her too."

Keep writing Ana!

(I accidentally clicked the button before I finished, so here's the rest of the review HAHA)

I love that your OCs' personalities came across so clearly. Preston's character particularly impressed me.

And of course, the part where Sirius's photographs are cut up. Oh gosh. It was so darn painful. And then you had the whole "snip" and "chop chop chop" parallel and it made it hurt so much more that the first chapter had these words in a totally different type of setting too. Absolutely brilliant scene.

All in all, I sincerely loved this :) (So sorry about the split up review! I haven't quite gotten used to my phone yet... xD)

Oh gods, the feels! Both of these chapters hit me in totally different ways.

Chapter 1 - Okay, first of all, your humor is GREAT. Like, the way you put little jokes and funny bits into the narration in Sirius's POV is awesome! I loved hearing Sirius lament over his poor hair XD And Remus snipping a large portion off made me laugh. Poor Sirius and his hair!

In addition (and this is a very small detail but still I love you for putting this in here), I love the part in Sirius's speech where you have him talk about Peter. A lot of fics disregard Peter as the Marauder's friend because he betrayed them, but it's nice that you show that all of them genuinely consider him as part of them.

Overall, I love this chapter for its light mood and the smiles it brought to my face :)

Chapter 2: A great contrast from the first fic, the second one had me tearing up. There's not much to say except that your OCs in here are

I thought this was a very heartbreaking look at Sirius' early years in Azkaban. I loved that he was looking back on the fond memories he had of his friends, and I think that the epilogue sentence was perfect. I love that he'd kept the ashes of the photograph (I'm assuming that's what they were) and that he'd carved 'mischief managed' into the wall in an attempt to remember his friends and all the good memories he had with them.

The only thing that confused me was how often Preston seemed to visit. Surely going to Azkaban would have an affect on him (because of all the dementors) so why put himself through that? And he would have known that the dementors would have eventually stripped Sirius of every good memory he had. Though I suppose some people are just like that, and he probably wanted to do some of it himself.

This was sweet and funny; I can totally imagine Sirius being such a baby about getting his hair cut. I'm not so sure Lily would have been pleased with the final result, though.

This is heartbreaking. Sirius is one of my very favorite characters, and to see him so broken like this - and the ashes under his pillow - mmph. Beautifully done, and now off to read mor of your fics :)

This was so sad! The idea of Sirius in prison is one I never like to think about, and seeing the contrast between pre-Azkaban Sirius and Azkaban Sirius is horrible. I never really think about the wizards who ran the place, so I liked it that you introduced something of a daily schedule and new characters... it made it all very believable and showed just how long Sirius has been cooped up there. It's horrible to think that he might have neen tortured in more than just the Dementor way.

You did a great job with the mood of the first chapter, though, and I particularly liked the dialogue.. irritated Sirius is the best, and his insistence to James that he shouldn't have to cut his hair was adorable (and he has a point). Of course Remus would end up doing the cutting, except he probably should have learned some tips beforehand!

Great read, there were very few SPaG errors and the descrilptions and emotions were grea

I'm not crying... nope.
This is wonderfully written (but also exceedingly painful). I loved the way that you showed all of the Marauders happy times throughout all of Sirius' pain as it really showed the grief he had.
Your characterisation of Sirius was great. The sarcasm and wit were still there even after having been stuck in Azkaban.
It flowed very well and your vocabulary is wonderful:)
A very moving tale. :)

Hey

This is a slap in the feels to everyone who read the first installment of this story - though I have no idea how Sirius managed to smuggle photographs into Azkaban. This doesn't really make sense, and the only thing I can use o explain it is that he was able to smuggle them in, you know, since he had them on him (I'm guessing) after leaving the ruined Potter House to kill Wormtail, was arrested in London, and sent straight to Azkaban without trial. . .

But that's all semantics.

I like the way you've created the realistic prison pecking order in this story, and the way that Sirius' photos were cut up to pieces by the kingpin of Azkaban. I feel that this was a very interesting way of showing how things were going on within Azkaban, and it added in that link to real world prisons.

The ending was a real hit to the feels - Mischief Managed was a great way to bring back to the melancholy theme of it all.

Overall, this was a great story.

-Ciao Mate

Hahaha, this is adorable! Sirius is such a cad. I love how it came full circle with Cupid, first with him threatening the spirit of love to actually having a lady pick him up at his best mate's wedding. Too funny!

It was genius having Remus do the actual cutting. Somehow, that job suits him. And then to have him mess it up because Sirius wouldn't sit still! Oh, I couldn't stop laughing. I mean, I knew it was coming, but it still serves him right for being so self-absorbed.

His toast is pretty amazing, too. I enjoyed how I could tell what was going on around him without ever needing to have his dialogue broken up for description or action. I like how he went from typically self-absorbed Sirius [You're welcome, by the way.] to being truly sincere [Ah, there's your smile! We'd begun to miss it. . . . All my love to you two.].

For a critique, I did wonder why Remus was so Muggle-ish as to use scissors to cut Sirius's hair. Why didn't he just use his want, as Mrs. Weasley does?

~ Anne

WAIT WAIT QLFC WUH-

OMG so the fact that you have Laurie as a prisoner is so ironic because Hugh Laurie plays House and I cannot xD

So... this wasn't what I signed up for T_T I was all OH YAY MORE CUTE FUNNY STUFF and then *ambushed by feels* YOU'LL PAY FOR THIS! *waves fist* ahem.. anyway, this was painful and I've been reading so much Sirius-in-Azkaban, Sirius-dying stuff lately and yup my poor achy breaky heart.

also "quarters" is barely the word I'd use for a cell. "cell" is the word I'd use for a cell lol.

"it was only till dawn..." - "it was only when dawn came that..."

THAT WAS SO PAINFUL AND THE STARK CONTRAST BETWEEN THE TWO CHAPTERS IS JUST AGH. AND THAT ENDING. GREAT JOB BUT THE FEEEEELLLLSSSSS

OK I really wanted to read this the second I read the "Fun guaranteed!" in the summary.

AHAHAHA THAT FIRST LINE! POOR CUPID XD Sirius is like a rabid dog when he's pissed. [too punny? oops.]

I like how Sirius is all "yeah I dont really care 'bout love one way or another BUT WHY THE FRACK MUST I CUT MY HAIR ESDTFTYUJKL" I feel ye bruh

SPaG: [Sirius had painstakingly...] This sentence is written weirdly. First of all, hair, even when plural, is referred to in the singular. Hair it. Also, I thought his hair was short? So the "now tied them up in a ponytail" makes no sense. Also I suggest breaking that sentence into two because it's too long and rambly.

OMG THAT FLASHBACK. LILY HAS PRONGS WRAPPED AROUND HER DAINTY LITTLE FINGER. WHIPPED INDEEDY.

ohmigosh Remus cutting Sirius's hair is so HOT and I'm not much of a Wolfstar fan but MAN is that HOT. Also I LOVED the "infinite patience" because that literally describes Remus.

OH I CAN FEEL MY MANHOOD SAPPING AWAY AHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHA siriusly sirius X"D im soryy lmfao

OMGHEMESSEDUPOMGOMGHAHAHAHHAA

And I SOO understand Sirius's pain at having short hair. I nearly DIED when I shaved one side of my head because there was no hair covering my ear and it was SO COLD.

I love how you tied the first and last sentence together!

I think you excel at humour and crack and you should NEVER write anything different!

LOTS OF LUFF-

Arty.