OMGs MY POOR BABY BROTHER IM SORRY I COULDN'T COME WITH MAMA!

Soooo... is he more broken by Calypso’s betrayal than rape? Caus he’s been raped in the past too. In a foster home he went to. If he wasn’t broken by it then, he shouldn’t be broken by it now. Or maybe it’s the fact that he killed someone that made him broken...

So good!

I used to love Calypso, but for now, SCREW HER! Omg, i was bawling over here. One does not simply bring back my favorite character and subject him to this much pain. Why bro? why?

The Spanish was spot on! Also, Leo is such a cinnamon roll. Seeing him in this story made me cry. Wonderful job, though, at portraying everyone!

Oh. Oh. Just oh. That was good. Oh. Wow.

(I feel like the only thing I can say is oh. Because oh.

I bless your eternal qualities
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Oh Leo honey. Oh poor Leo. Your story's good though. Good. Though I guess... Yeah, I like it. To a limit. (I'm sorry. I'm really really asexual so each. If probably like it more of I wasn't.

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That was really good! Angst and Hurt/Comfort, all the way! Captured it perfectly!

NOOOOO OLEASE DO MORE CHAPTERS THIS IS ABSOLUTE GOLD! THE BEST FANFICTION IVE EVER READ POSSIBLY! YOU CANT END IT THERE ILL BE SO GRATEFUL JUST PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE AND DO MORE CHAPTERS PLEEEEAAASSSEEE

That. Was. Really. Good.

I loved this story so much! Really the only Spanish I will correct you on is your use of usted. There are two words for you in Spanish; usted is formal (used with strangers, bosses, teachers, etc.) Tú is informal (used with family and friends), so it should be tú tienes instead of usted tiene. You can use usted, but it's very rare for usted to be used with family members. Other than that, your Spanish was pretty good. Keep writing; you're very good at it.

man I loved this short story

I COULDNT READ IT BECAUSE MY EYES WERE BLURRY FROM TEARS! Why must you hurt me this way?

Okay, I'm sorry for that last review, was writing for another story, no idea how THAT happened.

This story made me really happy. :) Like the kind of happiness that drowns you in waves, but its good drowning, like its purposeful and you can be in the water all day. ; I don't know. But I needed that right now. Its nice to be happy.