Great first guys stories go way to slow then he abandoned it's. he is writing great story but this way too slow .

the faunus n Grimm thing was odd but lo key kinda works ig

I'm incredibly confused currently

the marine corp vibes coming off this are insane. I can feel the knife hand

Please update this amazing story it been nearly a year since the last one

... He got clipped by a bullet yet could fight a Boarbatusk?

I'm sorry, that's not realistic.

Dust bullets from a handgun or automatic weapon will not one shot you, no matter their effect.

Imma say this now if Jaune was a Space Marine he would be a Chaplain with how high of an extreme he takes the saying 'Pain is Mandatory'

I want to eventually see a scene were Jaune is fighting someone and his Luka tattoo gets revealed and they like "Damn Fam you from Luka to why we fighting again?"

Love the story, Fantastic up until this point. The only thing I would possibly complain about is that there isn't more, but it has some sort of closure at this point. So all in all thanks for the wonderful read and thank you for ending it on a satisfying note (if it's not on hold or something and I just missed it or the updates are that space. I don't know but I look forward to anything to come if you decide to continue)

WTF is with every single half decent fanfic for jaun arc with a gamer system and almost immediately putting him in touch with the seedy underbelly to get anything done.

Why cant he just go to a fuxking gym why does it ALWAYS have to be crime

I read it all and I am kinda neutral to it now. Is this dead?

This chapter made me lose interest in the fiction, thus Grimm and faunus conversion shit is repulsive and kinda boring. I will read and see if you have succeeded in making it interesting in the next chapter. Seriously this animal and grimm shit wasn't needed at all. Well your story your choice.

Hey man this story is awsome keep up the good work. Your an awsome author and can't wait to see where this story goes

To summarize my points spend more time on Jaune’s journey, this could have been three chapters easy, with Jaune bonding with people in the guard and the caravan ride home, it however feels like an itemized list of things that happened. Read the rest at your own discretion. Where did you get the idea that mechanic-shift weapons are made of plastic? That’s the dumbest thing I’ve heard yet. Is it because the weapons are bright colors or something? There are such things as metal paints. Bullets the size of a grain of rice? That’s mass effect lore not RWBY lore, unless you’re trying to say the massive sniper rounds on Ruby’s belt are super tiny. Again dumb when you think about the larger variety of Grimm. A bullet that size would do nothing to a deathstaker, king taijutu, nevermore, nor a Goliath. If hunters fought only humanoid sized Grimm then it might have made sense. The death scene with the guard on the wall was poorly executed, it sounded like some odd sequential event instead of happening in a split second. A lot of this chapter was very rushed the pacing was nonexistent. This chapter should have been split into several different chapters. The training, the attack, the funerals and the trip home should have been split up. At the rate you were going the scene where Jaune got the tattoo should have been removed. None of them have any bond with him at all so why would they drag him there in the first place? Also soul tattoos...really? He has little to no interaction with the other guards, hell you tacked on the name for the guard on the wall when you simply should have re-written that initial greeting/shift change. All in all this seems more like a list of things that happened to Jaune than a person recounting a tale. I find this odd as your last chapter seemed fine for the most part. I can only guess that you are trying to get to a certain point in the story and trying to get there quickly without leaving out the other story points, even though you aren’t fleshing them out.

Interesting story so far, only one small error you say Grimms as the plural from of Grimm when Grimm is already both singular and plural. Other than that very minor error and one instance of “I I” being used the story is doing good.