Please come back.

Any plans to continue this?

Great beginning. Keep up the good work.

Another good chapter, my man! Always awesome to read your stuff, and glad to have you back writing :D

Thank you for continuing to write this.

Gotta say, I am extremely impressed with this story. The research and understanding of the inner workings of the game and its lore, and heck, even some pretty decent multi-verse theory (most writers tend to mess that up, it was well explained, good job). I was afraid the story wouldn't really take off, but you just took your time with setting it up, which I think is great. I am just wondering if this story might give us an explanation on link losing his right eye hmm?

Now a bit of critique. I am not the biggest fan of the layout. I find it a tad difficult to keep track of who is talking, mostly because sometimes different people talk in the same little box. Perhaps that's just my issue, but I find it a tad distracting from time to time.

Either way, I hope you will end up finishing this story, as its probably one of the best OoT fanfics I've read (atleast one that contains Malon as the love interest, which again, really tells me how well you seem to have an understanding of the timeline).

Chris: Pffffffahahahahahahahhaahhahhahahaah! That ending! I could barely hold my laughter!

Michael: I almost lost my composure as well. It was quite amusing.

It's unique seeing how a civilian gets into an adventure. This is practically routine for Link.

So Termina was just an hallucination, shame, I always thought of it as an alternate world or something like that. But hey, this works for the story.

Now I'm also curious about Saria's and Link's relationship, but that can wait, if it isn't the T-virus, it's a curse. Though, didn't the Deku seed bloom after the game, or was that only in the future? It's hard to remember after all this time.
Poor Malon doesn't seem to get a break, though it's interesting to see her reactions and her thoughts on all this - really fleshing out her character and showing us how she's getting overwhelmed by all this.

So here is the logic.

Link defeats Ganon.. Someone powered by the Triforce of power

But can not Handle a pack of Wolves even with the Goron braclet that give him Super Strength and get tired?

Sorry it took so long to read, but it's good that you're back at it, man :) It's been a long time coming.

Anyway, as for the chapter itseld: I enjoyed the awkwardness of Saria telling Link how much he'd grown; I loved the action when Link was fighting the Baba Serpents and Deku Babas, and I thought that he got the return he deserved, monster-ridden village aside, of course.

I look forward to your next chapter, man :) Welcome back.

overall very entertaining story you have so far, particularly with how you contrast the adorable romance between Link and Malon with the psychological issues Link struggles with as a result of his adventures. There are really only two things I can recommend for improvement. The first, in regards to the romance, is to avoid the points where Link or Malon internally monologue about all the qualities of the other, mainly because it has all the subtly of a jackhammer. It comes across as forced and awkward, rather than cute and/or meaningful. For a moment of realization (ie when Link first realizes he's interested in Malon) this kind of exposition is ok, but should otherwise be avoided. A cute blush or loving hug say far more than any such exposition anyway. In other words, show instead of tell.
The other point is in regards to your grammar, which is mostly fine except that you always use "whenever" instead of "when". "Whenever" is only used when describing something that happens routinely (ie whenever I go to Boston I get stuck in traffic for an hour) or for something that may happen at some unknown point in the future (ie I'd love to get the new gaming console whenever it comes out). Otherwise, just use "when".

hope that helps! Carry on )

Dude, it's been 8 months... we need this to finish!

I swear to the Golden Goddesses that if you don't finish this fanfiction then I will lose faith in writers. You have an amazing thing going here and I can tell you are just getting started. Keep it up. I quite enjoyed these first 10 chapters.

Plot hole alert! If Terminal existed only in Link's head then how did the mask salesman, the skull kid, Tatl, and Tael travel there? Especially since skull kid had traveled back and forth before since he knew the giants.

So many questions on poor Link's mind, and of course, Mr. Happy has to be an ass about it. You'd think that the riddles would be enough, but going fishing when Link needs him most? That's just uncalled for :P

Anyway, another great chapter, dude. Hopefully Link gets to the Kokiri Village in time to help Saria and the others. I look forward to more :)