This story has a rather ambitious but interesting plot concept. Often times I feel a strong distaste for OC’s, however even though many of the characters in this story are OC’s, I can’t say that I dislike any of them. From what you’ve written so far, they all seem realistic and well thought out.

That last chapter definitely took an unexpected twist, I found myself actually saddened by the plant demons death, able to effectively see the situation from another perspective. Surely, a sign of an exceptional story is when the writer is able to make you feel something unexpected.

I love this story, the idea is very original and your writing makes it even better! Please continue! :)

MAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH UPDATE!

I love this story so much so far! Please continue! Rin will eventually open the sword though right?

to feel joy for your return Melon monchi. Poor Astaroth has fallen into the trap of misleading Yuki-chan? possibly, after all who has come out and I can not imagine how you will keep your pants dry when you assault the shadows Samael (as he likes to do) .Shiemi by Shiatori I do not think it will work ... thanks for updating and I will penndiente new chapters and punishment Samael has prepared for using fakes keys ... do not forget the vanity of King of Time.

Damn this sene tho. I teared up a bit at the end. Anyway great chap and update soon!

:( Aww... now we know things from Ash's POV. Damn you, Yukio!

I really enjoy your story quite a lot. It is a really unique way on examining how the interactions of demons change based on alterations to the main canon plot, and I like how you're giving poor Astaroth some more time in the spotlight. He probably deserves more! I know that for certain. In my own story, Paradise Acquired, he's currently in a coma! I should probably work on fixing that... I look forward to this story, and if it's alright with you, I'd like to give you a shout-out in my story, because this is just too unique not to spread!
Shinigami

Exciting, looking forward to reading more about Astaroth's time in Assiah and Rin's in Gehenna, waiting for chapter 7

It reminds a bit of kyo Kara maou. It's really unique . Are you going to keep Rin character canon or space him up a bit. Can't wait for more

WHAT THE HELL! UPDATE THIS! I COMMAND YOU TO UPDATE THIS FUCKING AWESOME STORY!

HOLY SHIT THIS IS AMAZING! You're amazing, the way you wrote this makes the reader go so into the story, it's great. I really hope you update soon :)

Wow, I nearly cried at the end of this chapter. The choice that Rin has to make, and the choices that Ammon has already made... Just wow. I absolutely love this story. I wish I reviewed sooner, but I hope this is good enough. Your writing is so nice, catching the thoughts and feelings of all the characters in such a seamless way. It's fantastic! Ammon is so well thought out and the way he speaks is so much like Amaimon in it's playfulness at times, while other times he's serious. Please update soon!
-AnonymousAndrea
P.S. Ifrit sounds AWESOME and omg Ammon sews!
P.P.S. The way you turned Gehenna into a suffering kingdom without a king is amazing and fits perfectly with canon!

I really like this story the only thing that is bothering me a littel is that it seems like Rin bit useless (and thats coming from a really big Rin is awesome believer) and i have a question because its not totally clear to me if rin has drawn his sword or not? Well good luck on the next chapter x

Awesome chapter, you did a good job on it! :D I REALLY can't wait for the next chapter, update soon. Also how do you pronounce Ifrit?