Very nice story please continue.

3 of 10 because of too many songs cluttering up the narrative.

Too many songs and their lyrics. That plus it is bad. Work on your grammar and use the proper tense. It will get you more readers and good reviews if you put things in a grammar check program BEFORE placing them on this kind of websites.

you put what people say in "quotation marks". And when you change speakers the next group goes into a separate paragraph.

Can you put quotations...it's kinda hard for me to read...it sounds like an awesome plot but it has a ton of grammar issues...

Ok, ok, we get it! XD

So, is Danny a full ghost or does he no longer exist?

Now I really wanna watch Naruto.

I see we have the same taste in music. :)
Silver: Kodiakwolfe13 used Angel of Darkness to describe Danny.
I think she described Jason with Angel with a Shotgun.

Is Danny dead too?

I really like the songs.

Please update soon!

Fics like this one are something of a rare treat...!

In this story the Ghouls don't know who Danielle's Creators is, in later chapters Danielle's creators will come and try to destroy Monster High. I'm sorry that I used they said that. I'm still new at writing and in the next chapter it might be liked that, but in chapter three I promise you it won't
bergstrom528

Nice story. But maybe you could try using quotations instead of only variations of 'they said that.' And when you say her 'creator' why not just say Vlad? Your going out of your way to emphasize that it could be anyone, so could it possibly be a non-cannon creator of Dani?
Once again great story. The plot was well thought of.