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Pure garbage trash shit

I thought it was a really good story untill you had Naruto and sasukes first moment's as they were just not very feasible to me.
Naruto who was trained and really good at CONTROLLING his emotions starts by completely destroying him and making him cry like come on. Compared to Naruto all of them are children as his fought in a war had the type of training his been through and suddenly as soon as he sees Sasuke BAM all that goes out the window.

Update?

please update this fanfic soon

what is the explanation of not telling minato about his heritage when he was a genin, chunin or does he have to be a kage level to know about his is not a kind of person who would just tell everyone that he is is completely idiotic and stupid to not telling minato his heritage.

Great story so far... i wish you would continue and not leave such a good idea for a story unfinished.
I see potential, and if you ever need help with it PM me.

please continue the story,
its really good!

Great story I really can't wait to see the next post.

nice awesome fic when is he next update

nice

Fantastic!

Well technically Shisui should be alive, and with Kotoamatsukami he could control a jinchuuriki easily. I just think it was too easy for Naruto to "deduce" that Madara was the manipulator of the Kyuubi, despite nothing else even pointing in that general direction. I also don't like how easily he knew the secrets of the Uchihanot many people even knew about the Mangekyo at this point, and Madara had "died" decades before. it's just straining to the suspense of disbelief. is it possible that Naruto could learn all of this? I mean sure, given he spent his entire life under conspiracy theories (remember nothing at this point even pointed to him). By the way, slitted pupils SUCK for detail perception. Cats (and other animals with slitted pupils) have worse image detail then humans because of how much light gets in the retina. The only positive you get from slitted pupils is night vision and vertical periphery vision that makes it easier to spot movement. Otherwise you'd need glasses to even see details as well as a human with 20-20 vision can.

solid story, but you do too much telling and not enough showing. for instance, "He can control the Kyuubi and uses a space time ninjutsu that is more powerful than the Hiraishin" how? teleportation is pretty OP as it is. show us how.