It's so beautiful...

BOOOO STOP MAKING ME SHIP GRINDELORE
and now I ship both of them with Death on the side *flips table*
Honestly though, I get why so many reference this fic as a work of pure art, it is wonderful in so many ways, the little details really add to the story, the colours make it vivid in a beautiful way. I love how Dumbledore convinces death to play Chess with him, and that Death loses. The comments about people trying to win over death was incredible, and a great reference to how Dumbles was so close to it. I think my favorite part though was how it was all pretty heavy and then you ended it with them bickering over holding hands!
Yep I am ruined, I now like Dumbledore.
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This pairing is brilliant. It is fantastically and poignantly written. Great job!

The part Death played in this was amazing. As was the interactions between these characters - characters which I don't normally get the honor to see in this manner. This piece is truly unique and breath taking. You writing is superb. It's visual, detailed, and your vocab usage is fabulous.

That was brilliant. I hadn't thought of Death as having such a...vindictive? personality, but I suppose it would get quite dull always watching humans interact and never being able to join in.

I love the fact that Death sees auras and describes everything in terms of the colors of their auras. It's a lovely touch. It's intriguing to see how Death can mess with events and give them a helping hand, so to speak, like when he assists in Ariana's death.

The ending was rather sweet, in a humorous sort of way? I love Albus and Gellert bickering over whether they should hold hands, and Death's musing is quite entertaining, too.

This is brilliantly done.

God, this is brilliant. I loved your extensive vocabulary throughout the story. The plot was pretty good, and even through the time was vague, when there was a clear event happening, you did a great job making it obvious. As such, it was easy to get an idea of where things were. You did a wonderful job.

Pardon my french, but this is the coolest $h!T I've read in quite some time. I'm sitting here smiling, seriously giddy, because I freaking love death! His character was the most fantastic thing. The balance here between angst and light hearted moments was flawless, and you captivated me from start to finish. I don't even /ship/ this. You have joined an elite club of non canon stories in my favorites list - congrats :D

I found this beyond interesting. Your descriptions, particularly at the beginning, are stunning. Your depiction of death was awesome. From sarcastic, to hurt and lonely, he's such an interesting character. My feelings towards him seemed to be on a rollercoaster, first I was irritated, then I pitied him, and so on.
Brilliant job with this, you really take the reader on a journey with the characters :)

Wow, this was amazing. I don't even have words to explain how much I enjoyed reading this story.

I love how it's from the point of view of Death. I love how he was the reason the spell hit Ariana too, and the way he watched the pair.

The ending was really cute. "I am not holding your hand. Merlin, you're a hundred and fifteen, Albus." LOL!

Another great piece by LokiThat's one hell of a character to take on! But I really liked what you did with Death. He seems kind of detached from everything but bored and a little sarcastic, which I think really works.
The Chernobyl reference confused me because it seemed out of place, especially because it's still Albus' youth. I guess you were going for the idea that time isn't linear to Death or doesn't mean anything? If that was your intention, I like it, I just would have personally preferred it to be a little more explicit.
But I love how easily you were able to apply this different perspective to Grindledorethe way that Death sees things in a at that neither of them do. It raises the question of the reliability of the narrator and of versions of the truth which I just lovedSPaG spotto be seen be somebody" should be 'by'

Very nice - I loved the way Albus met Death - with not even slight hesitation. On character!

That was an interesting and intriguing read. You managed to pull this off without the mountain of angst I thought it would invoke, and you actually made it kind of fluffy to boot. That is not an easy job to do when your main character is Death itself. So, bravo.

I like how you slowly brought Death's desires to light. To be loved, to extinguish light and color, and finally to be seen. I also liked how you portrayed the relationship between Albus and Gellert: two powerful Wizards that were once friends but due to life and its many obstacles were separated from one another.

I have one question however, is Death in your story out of time? I mean can he travel through time, or does he just have fore knowledge of future events? Since he knew what a nuclear reactor was and liked to visit Chernobyl. Just curious.

This was a very intriguing interpretation of 'third party' one I am sure 99% of people wouldn't have thought of. That makes me like it. I like different. The fact that you wrote it from Death's POV, too, was great. It really makes me glad that I am not up against you in QL. Phew :P

There were a few places I think you forgot to change your sentence, so both parts were there; but it was easy to work out.

Over all, I think this was a very lovely, original story, and I loved it. Well done!

I really enjoyed the way you described everyone's auras throughout the fic. It made the fic full of wonderful colors that couldn't be seen in the physical planes of reality. And you characterized Death beautifully as well, though I still hate him for nudging the spell towards Albus' sister and causing her death. Why couldn't he be patient and just wait for it to happen naturally? Troublesome Death.

Anyway, the idea of Albus beating Death in wizard's chess is hilarious, and I enjoyed the conversation between Gellert and Albus about holding hands after everything that had happened. Of course Death would get impatient and shove them in a, "hurry to your death" way.

Oh, I love your depiction of Death. I love that you've given Death a voice and image! Sneaky and smug, that's what Death is, with a touch of cynicism.

Your use of words was absolutely magnificent to read. I love the precision with which you must have chosen them. They are so specific. Definitely a gold star from me for word choice. The sentences had a very abstract and other-worldly quality about them as I read them.

Almost immediately I know which scene this fic is about and I'm on tenterhooks!

'a bridge of love that refused to burn' - brilliant!

Cruel, cruel Death! I really felt the sadistic nature of Death in that second section. Here we see Death not just as an obserever but a perpetrator.

Everyone wants to master Death and Death wants to master love. I actually felt some sympathy for Death, just for an infinitesimal moment.

Gellert in prison, nice read. I have to say as the fic goes on I'm finding myself more engrossed and feel the concept with the colours has become a lot more easier to follow than in that initial first section.

'Regret was a hard mistress to be in bed with' - Oh it certainly is. Very nicely put. My favourite line so far!

I absolutely love that interaction with Gellert and Albus at the beginning of the last section and even the end. The dialogue was so on point, it really stood out for me.

Aww...Death is just lonely, that is all. I can't believe I'm empathising with Death...LOL! You have created a whole new character.

Yes, what a perfect ending!

Oh, I think I'm in love with you Loki (I promise I haven't been drinking :-p). I just absolutely loved reading this. I loved the way you wrote it. I loved your characterisations. I loved everything!