Please continue.

It's not that modern people can't be stored in the Throne of Heroes, it's that since the feats the Throne takes into account are so easily reproducible in modern times and since modern weapons are typically mass-produced and impersonal, modern people find it harder to get recorded.

When I first started writing my own OC grail war I was advised to check out your fic. Now that I am up to date on the chapters, I am glad I was given that advice.
You've done a good job creating your OCs, something many writers fail at, and I'm honestly really looking forward to seeing more of them.
The only complaint I can think of is, some of the sections where the master sees the servant's memories seem unrelated to the plot and as a result slow down the story. But given that all these memories are well written and clearly thought out makes this easy to look past.
I can't wait for the next chapter and if you have time please check out my fate fic and let me know what you think.

good

I have to say you handeld this fairly good. I am interessted to see how it continiues, especially when Richard and Arthuria meet. By the way, is he your own interpretaiton of Richard or is he the one from Fate Strange Fake? Because that would be so damm awesome, he has Robin of Loxley, William Marshal and Saint Germain on his beck and call. And he can play e-guitar :)
Seriously though, that would be so damm awesome.

I love your assassin, its just so cool story wise on how you mad3 a world war 2 red army sniper as a heroic spirit and the part whare she doubt herself and the part "Im sorry, Im sorry, Im sorry" is just for me really creats the feel and character of roza. thank you for sharing this story and please keep up the good work.

This chapter actually changes the scope of this Grail War somewhat, what with there being so many Command Seals. However, since we haven't seen more Servants than the seven original so far I'm not sure how that is supposed to be interpreted.

I'm not sure which part you're refering to when mentioning "info-dump sequences"; if you mean explanations about Saber's situation, it's something important to know and didn't take too much time. If you mean the info about the Clock Tower, likewise it was too short to be bothering. Overall I liked that chapter - I don't really dislike info dumps in general (unless they're done in looong, not particularly interesting scenes with irrtating music in the back ground).

i'm pretty satisfied with El- Melloi appearance on the story.

Glad to see you're still writing. I'll admit I'm hoping for Atilla to be defeated just so we can see Iskandar again. Sorry him and Waver are my favorite servant master duo in the Fate franchise. Looking forwards for more!

This is awesome work. I really hope you continue, because I'd love to see where this goes.

Also, if you haven't decided who you plan to use for Berserker yet, can I make a suggestion? The legendary samurai Benkei. Look him up.

buen capitulo-good chapter

Welcome back! Looking forwards for more!

Man, I missed you. There are only two OC Holy Grail Wars on this website as far as I'm aware of, and one of them is being writtent by me. It's good to read a quality fanfiction.

I really liked this chapter, especially the Troy segments. Though about that I'd like to point out that Penthesilea isn't part of the Iliad, considering the latter ends with the funerals of Hector.

On the other hand, was that Berserker?! I mean, I probably should have done the equation earlier, but I'm still taken by surprise. He sounds too sane to have EX rank ME, so either his rank is quite low like Kintoki or Beowulf, or he's a special case like Jack. Either way, I'm looking forward learning more about him.

interesting start.
p.s I am surprised he did not start a grain grail war to inshore victory.

buen capitulo-good chapter