At this point I'm just waiting to see how she kills Umbridge...I don't know if that's a good thing or not, but I love the plotline!

Awesome job with this story I liked it

I just wanted to put here that even though it was only in the omake, the hymen isn’t always torn the first time you have sex, nor does the first time have to be painful. Saying that the hymen is torn the first time and that it has to be painful is just wrong. The hymen can be torn from everyday activities and some women never tear their hymen.

now, what I want to know is if Erised was meant as a weapon using the Desire demon or as a prison for the desire demon

Excellent story! Now on to the next part..

pyrrha branwen. you aren't being subtle with your RWBY reference.

Your writing is very good and I loved your story, however I couldn't keep reading it. You have so many different gods that it was giving me to much of a headache trying to keep track of them all. With the greek and Roman I got but adding the celtics and Egyptians I felt cross eyed. I'm not hating on you your very good but I couldn't keep reading sorry

When is she going to become a goddess though. Please make her one eventually! Maybe the goddess of shadows?

...Didn't see that coming o.O Poor Sna-nape XD

Pyrrha's not a sword, she's an axe. a lot more oomph than a sword, but really all it's for good is the oomph.

or not, what do I know, all I do is play video games. and I much prefer the dagger using characters. and the bow, but that's a completely different grouping of weapon.

doesn't she still have to destroy a diadem before they're all dealt with?

is there a reason you keep name-dropping games that are released the year after your established timeline?
yes I know it's inconsequential in the run of things, but it's that kind of details that bother me.

am I supposed to be thinking of Pyrrha's mother as War from Good Omens? cause I'm definitely getting that kinda vibe from the little bits Pyrrha says.

two more games that don't exist until the next year.

if your going to bring things up like, this game will come to America next year, then I'm going to comment every time I notice your character playing games that haven't been created yet.

is it somehow more unfair than of she joined a competition in Ancient Greece?

if Pokemon Blue isn't coming to America for another year why does she have a Gameboy Color? it didn't exist, even in Japan until a month after Pokemon came to America.