Reviews for The Commission
Royal-Canadian-Flame chapter 1 . 4/2
Indomitable corporate takeovers? Incredible playing of both sides by both sides to generate more revenue? Total market control? Holy shit man, this is awesome. Although... that accounting department, cause you have to trust the accountants, must have a decent cut of this all or one hell of a benefits program
Aselo chapter 14 . 3/17
Well this was great although it's a shame my binge read ended...and it is nearly 5 in the morning...
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 14 . 2/19
God damn, this was one hell of a read. Best RWBY fic i have read where Ruby and co where villains. I can only hope that one day you will come back to this work, as it really is something special.
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 13 . 2/19
Oh shit seriously. One of the few fics where Ruby actually is one of the Maidens and its dead. It's so damn good too, i kinda dont wanna read the next chapter because if i do, well thats it, no more.
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 10 . 2/19
There has to be something wrong with me as i find Neo so fucking hot.
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 3 . 2/19
Not sure why they so worried. They won through sheer luck that its tusk was already seriously damaged.

They showed no skill that was all that exceptional.
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 2 . 2/19
So, i guess they where Team RWBY at one point. First chapter seemed to hint that Ruby was still the leader of the group.

I am a little curious as to there time in Beacon.
YuukiAsuna-Chan chapter 1 . 2/19
Seems interesting. Shame it's dead.
Abstract Ideas chapter 14 . 10/12/2019
If a bit of an unexpected request, can you at least post one last chapter detailing the general plot of where you saw this fic going? The motivations of RWBY, the general ending you were planning... similar to College Fool's Writer Games? You know, where, instead of writing the story, you just write the plot instead?

Think of how grateful your readers would be. Am I built tripping you? 100%. Am I ashamed of it? Absolutely not. I want to see the ending quite badly, or at least where the rest of the story was going to go. So, yes, I request that you 'finish' the story off with the brief outline of the remaining plot.
Ase Of SpADeZ chapter 14 . 10/11/2019
For the record, I think this was very well written
sondowth chapter 14 . 5/1/2019
Please update this story
Twisted Stigma chapter 8 . 12/12/2018
"Clever girl..."

I love Jurassic Park references.
Videocrazy chapter 14 . 10/25/2018
I can understand a lack of desire or motivation. I'm sad that it cut off at the climax, but it's understandable.

For what it's worth, this is an amazing story. Both sides give and take (though I personally would have liked to see the Strategos come out ahead a little more), so it feels like an actual war. I also enjoyed your take on Team CFVY a lot.

I suppose my biggest issue with the story is Team JNPR. Despite the Strategos having far more power, influence, and resources that Salem's faction in canon, Team JNPR (and Team CFVY) feel come out on top. Not only do they survive their encounters without a single relevant long-term injury between them, but frequently outright win fights they should have no right to survive. Save Pyrrha, I can't think of any reason for this beyond giving the Strategos a serious threat, and it was always jarring.

The major regret I have woth this story is the Strategos' motivation. It's clear from what we see of them that they're not in this for evil/destruction's sake (or in Blake's case, not just for destruction's sake). They're not mustache-twirling villains, they're doing what they think will help the world in the long run. Maybe they're right, maybe they're wrong, but I wish I at least knew what their endgame was.
trialway01 chapter 3 . 2/20/2018
I had a feeling that if Teams JPNR and CFVY(along with their allies) continue to ruin the Commission's operations or outright ruin their plan in regards to the Vytal Festival, something tells me that Team RWBY(the Commission in this fic) might summon Neo to . . . silence them permanently should they refuse to work with them, if they didn't cause enough damages to their schemes that would make it really ugly, don't you think.
trialway01 chapter 14 . 2/20/2018
Well, just give the author some time before deciding to continue with the story. Who knows, the author may decide to go back with new ideas for it.
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