I enjoyed this, a little titalation, a little humor. Please keep it up.

The grammar and pacing are really good, except for the inconsistency of how you insert the lyrics, but the different tones of the scenes also allow it to flow a little better.

Not sure on the characters yet, need more.

Hmmm, a setup chapter. But a setup to what, I wonder? You must keep writing them for I am in suspense.

I hope the "complete" tag is just a leftover from earlier. You've pretty much promised a meet between Kim and Shego, or Kim and Onyx, or Lynne and Onyx, or however you structure it.

Speaking of which, nice how Lynne is growing to be her own persona, more and more separate from Kim, making Kim work more at switching between. And trust Kim's innocence to not knowing what 'sub-space' means in that context.

I like this chapter, but it does feel like a connecting piece, joining the meeting of Shego and Kim in the first chapter to another in the next. I wonder if Shego was actually there while Kim was looking. Did she just leave her guitar in an open locker? Doesn't seem like her. And of course it was half plugged in, suggesting that Shego was getting ready to play when she realized Kim was looking for her. It's amusing to think of her hiding while Kim searched out the guitar. But it doesn't follow, unless Shego was performing that night, and Val would have known if she were on the schedule.

Well Kim had anything but a dull night, that's for sure.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

Interesting. Looking forward to the Shego/Kim next meet.

Well, now you've done it. With the second chapter, you've set the stage. Now you need a third chapter to start the show. Kim and Shego on stage, now that's a show to behold.

Very nice chapter. Can’t wait to read more

Good follow up. I wonder if shego and Kim ever cross paths there

After the performance Shego pulled, I would be surprised if she didn't get an encore, heh.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

i was going to save this story to read for later but i just couldn't wait. such a fun story

More please.

Very good! Didn't think that anyone remembered the old-time Burley-Que. Well, I don't remember it since I was coming into my teen years when it was starting to die out, but there was a place in Honolulu called The Forbidden City which featured singers and comedians in addition to the strippers (with pasties). It was a rather utilitarian looking joint with a scary tiki idol in the front.

I'd love to see some more of this!

Very enjoyable. It nicely showed all the small steps for how people can end up doing the strangest things. Ones they never ever thought that they would do.

Surprised that Shego and Drakken were still being villainous,mout that's life. Still, Shego was gone so quick. She and Kim banter so well together, though this was a pat more adult.

This is great; the entire idea is so unique, and you give it enough backstory that the idea of Kim "going burlesque" actually seems plausible. The parallels drawn between her two worlds support this, and I love the entire concept.
I agree with another reader on the ending; if you are actually going the end it here, the ending seemed to fall a bit flat in comparison to the material you had written in the rest of the piece. Then again, that could also be me being bias in that I would have loved to see a bit of Kigo, ahaha.
I would love to see how this moves forward, if you decide to continue it! You have a fantastic writing style, so keep up the good work (and thanks for returning to the KP fandom)!