This is so well written. Regulus is reminding me allot of Sirius here

[For some reason I clicked the wrong button by mistake, so ignore the other review - it is half done. I'm starting over (obviously c&ping what I've already written, lol :P)

Barty/Regulus - I have a feeling Sophie will have me hooked to this pairing by the end of this year D:
I'm reviewing as I'm reading, so it'll be a jumble of positives and concrit. Bear with me, lol.

I think you overdid with the book in the beginning. If you're describing it in too much detail, the precise name could be left out because too much info makes things slightly boring.

Oh! OHH, I get it! This is precious!

[requesting information from the bookshops, who had] - I can't point the reason exactly, but for some reason this sentence reads /wrong/. Try rewriting?

Again, I think the word 'book' was overused, which somehow took the spotlight away from the characters. It was as if the first section was just about the book and Barty/Reg was secondary. Oops!

Oh dear, I love the way Regulus is characterised. Confident, sassy, love him! (And poor, innocent Barty! :P)

Once again, I think the over-repetition of 'hand' was not required and it took attention away from the other things (like the action itself).

The second time you name the book - now /that/ is understandable, and the small description actually helps. Also, I'm loving the way you guys have written each scene so vividly. I can just picture them happening!

May I mention this here: I love your Madam Prince! xD

Barty's thoughts as the other kids chatter about make me feel sorry for him :( And, gods, I loved the way you painted such a depressing *cough cough* description of the manor.

The last 'Where is /mother/' was missing a question mark.

Damn! I hate Crouch Sr. for how he left his ailing wife to someone else's care just because he's too busy to look after her. That scene seriously made me cry! How can people even do that to their loved ones? Thinking there're things important than them?

The 12 O's. This is getting intense, and I'm hating Sr. more by minute (and loving Jr!)

Fuck! Is he even human, using an unforgivable on his own son? I mean I know he did that later, but right now, Barty's just an innocent child! He's practically pushing his son towards Voldemort! Never have I ever hated Barty Crouch Senior more!

[But even worse than that; he hadn't allowed Barty to visit his mother] - the semicolon should instead be a comma.

Oh, Barty! I feel so much for him, and I'm so glad Regulus is there to make him feel better. I like the way you wrote everything here - it felt so real - and Regulus was great!

[Last being, his mother] - comma not needed.

[With that thought, he tried to tighten his grip even more, ignoring the part of him that wanted to just stay like that with Regulus] - this sentence has issues as it is self-contradictory.

[friends seemingly endless ebony eyes] - missing apostrophe in friends'.

Wow! This was an intense ride. It was well written, and I loved the way you characterised each character. The flow was great, and the plot in itself was woven so intricately, I feel it all happened in my brain as I read.
I loved this heads to toes; brilliant job, Liza and Sophie!

Cheers!
~Raven

Barty/Regulus - I have a feeling Sophie will have me hooked to this pairing by the end of this year D:
I'm reviewing as I'm reading, so it'll be a jumble of positives and concrit. Bear with me, lol.

I think you overdid with the book in the beginning. If you're describing it in too much detail, the precise name could be left out because too much info makes things slightly boring.

Oh! OHH, I get it! This is precious!

[requesting information from the bookshops, who had] - I can't point the reason exactly, but for some reason this sentence reads /wrong/. Try rewriting?

Again, I think the word 'book' was overused, which somehow took the spotlight away from the characters. It was as if the first section was just about the book and Barty/Reg was secondary. Oops!

Oh dear, I love the way Regulus is characterised. Confident, sassy, love him! (And poor, innocent Barty! :P)

Once again, I think the over-repetition of 'hand' was not required and it took attention away from the other things (like the action itself).

The second time you name the book - now /that/ is understandable, and the small description actually helps. Also, I'm loving the way you guys have written each scene so vividly. I can just picture them happening!

May I mention this here: I love your Madam Prince! xD

Barty's thoughts as the other kids chatter abound