JNPR story arc is definitely my favorite. I wish Pyrrha hadn't been made to be so psychotic, though. Hopefully that's fixed when they do what they do in Ch.30.

I hope the ending to the series isn't too dark, though. I like darkness when it is resolved. Not necessarily live happy ever after, but at least to have learned to live happily despite still suffering. To be able to be truly happy despite suffering, you have to believe that life doesn't end in death. Life is meaningless and fleeting if we all end up in a void. Love won't be remembered, evil will go unpunished; good or bad mean nothing. That's why, despite not being sure it exists, we HAVE to believe in some sort of afterlife. If you're happy and don't believe in it, it's because you're fooling yourself, and at some point, those lies will crumble and the truth will be laid bare. I don't know if God exists, but it's my only hope, and that hope isn't baseless. The things I've heard from so many different people... I actually think God exists.

I liked this chapter, but I admit I didn't like the end. I don't like it when drama is created from entirely preventable situations. Blake could have told Yang right then and there that she hadn't caused that scene, but she didn't, only for the sake of creating drama. It's cheap, honestly.

Someone has been reading Mistborn

Wraith is dreadfully similar to elend venture

Stupid is what this chapter is, as is everything with Pyrrha in this story. She is not Magneto, and having her now be some ultra superhuman on top of it just utterly ridiculous.

ik this story (series) has been finished for a super long time but everything i've read has been amazing so far and dare i say better than canon? :p i love the level of worldbuilding and the characterization you've given to everything & everyone in this story, it's just. wow. all the praise for how you handled team rwby's...reactions...to the fall of vale. it's really amazing! the emotional parts all actually manage to evoke emotion and things like that interrogation scenes were super uncomfortable but i guess that was the point so kudos :') i get a lot of mistborn (by brandon sanderson?) vibes from it tbh, like with some terminology (Snapping, pyrrha's Pushing and Pulling on metal, & the atlas ball scenes and whatnot) and honestly that makes it all the better. i also love the mythology you've built up between ozpin (who btw can i say i love how you've characterized him in this story, bc he's always given off - to me at least - a super slimy & two-faced vibe, especially in the last couple canon volumes but idk idk) and cinder and all those people. anyway yeah this is one of the best fics in general i've ever had the pleasure to read and i'm looking forward to seeing how it all pans out!

Have you ever thought of publishing this as a real book?

This brings a whole new meaning to the phrase "Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned."

Wow...just wow!

The image of Ozpin being a badass is so vivid.. I just wish that the people who animate RWBY could take the time to read and animate this story.. I bet it would look amazing

the chapter with the reveal of raven was sloppy. exceptionally so

omg I loved the ball chapter with ruby, but I must say I believe she's a hunter not a mistborn

Long time away hm? Well this chapter gave enough reasons to get back up to speed with this story. Amazing sequence and story development. Before Pyrrha's chapters felt a bit out of place but now I can't wait to see more of her!

The garrote scene on chapter 20 was amazing! The darker tone set for vale really really fits the atmosphere. At first you gave a notion that the more carnal torments of war were restricted to vale, but bringing it all the way to Atlas gave us a new notion about length in with the conflict is affecting the characters. Also, putting the interrogation scenes side by side was a masterful touch. "No matter you are or were you are, war is war". Or something on those lines.

The moral and emotion descent on the characters is also really good. We can feel how they are compromising themselves and there is a rising tension for when they will have to come to terms with their demons.

And of course Ruby thinks Weiss is not ready but Weiss thinks the problem lays with Ruby. Why would that be any easier for them right?

Hugs!

Loving it!

Well hello! I have been away for a while but don't think I abandoned this story. Hope you didn't miss me too much [omitted a snort].

I'll start by saying how beautifully well written the Ozpin passages a few chapters back were. The lore, the backgrounds, the interactions, I loved every single thing about it. What you presented about the panteon definitely took this story to a different level. The scenery and the characters sounded straight out of a DnD campaign and I have to ask if that wasn't among your inspirations.

Your idea for Ozpin's semblance is fantastic. You described it very well without pushing too much information at once and it fits completely the new character you built around him. Allow me a wild guess, but something tells me that the explosion was part of his own plan to get rid of the council and inspire support from Atlas.

Now, for chapter 17. At first I was questioning why would they send Ruby by herself, but it made fair sense through the chapter. Lobelia seemed like a very convenient ally, but is evident that she has at least one reason or two to dislike the Schnee, so I have mixed feeling about her yet. About Wraith... Call me paranoid, but judging from the environment, Ruby is probably walking into a big trap. Oh well...

Anyway to close this long overdue review, your writing ia amazing as always. Maybe there were a few points on past chapters in which you started writing something in a way, changed your mind and forgot some leftovers from your previous sentence in the text, but nothing that compromisses the whole. I can't pinpoint exact examples now, as it didn't happen in this chapter, but I'll write down in case I see anymore of those.

(Also I made a very terrible mistake of reading the author's note from the first chapter in Repentance and there is a bit that says "Don't worry, his is still a White Rose story". WHAT YOU GONNA DO TO THEM?)

Hugs.