Wow

Excellent job! I may or may not be crying right now, sorry. That was beautiful. You description of what was going on in his soul, the tie-in to Tolkien... I cannot describe in words how perfect this is.

It was breathtaking. I have no words, but, Lord, thank you so much.

Awwww, so sweet! Very nice! An excellent story!

I liked seeing the psychological, even spiritual battle paralleling the events of the movie here. The simple resonance of the images of the cold, the dark, the ice, and the star work really well to give Bucky's mental struggle a concrete setting, one easy to visualize. The difference in writing style between the two strands worked well, too: it felt right to give the soul's battle a "loftier," more poetic tone, and that contrast contributed strongly to the story's mood.

Good work!
-Crackers

Dear Thalion Estel,

I enjoyed it. I also enjoyed the symbolysm with being trapped, then the soul/star reaching towards the light only to encounter the fence. But the best part was when the fence was burned down.

It was so heartbreaking, and yet the imagery helped me grasp the feeling of this Winter Soldier/Bucky Barnes (poor guy)!

Great job! It was well written!

As always, you had perfect, impeccable grammer, and the structure of the paragraphs was well organized. I didn't see any spelling errors. but the best part was in the way you presented the story, with symbolism and imagery! Great job!

I'd also like to thank you for dedicating the story to me.

Please do a sequel! It would be too sad to end it here! I'd like to see what happens next.

Sincerely,

Firestar'sniece

A very well-written one-shot! I like the way you described the Winter Soldier's soul, and the way HYDRA thought they had destroyed the good soul of Bucky Barnes' permanently. Instead of simply recounting events from the film, you described how the events impacted on the Soldier's "soul" and memory. Your story is also filled with detail and description, which is excellent.

[Until there was a speck of light. "Bucky?" the Captain asked] I thought “speck of light” was a perfect way to describe the effect Steve saying Bucky’s name had on him. It was a simple comment, but it was enough to spark something in the Soldier’s mind.

[A tiny point of light, like the evening star on a clear night, appeared in the abyss around the Soldier's soul... The soul reached through the bars, groping for the distant point of light and weeping as it failed to touch the warm, friendly star.] These few paragraphs (I was going to quote the entire section, but figured it would be better just to quote the first and last sentence) are just brilliant. The descriptions are excellent and the emotions are powerful. It provides such a deep look at what’s going on inside the mind and soul of the Winter Soldier, the internal battle he’s fighting. Though you do that consistently throughout the entire story, this section really stood out for me.

[Then the electricity turned to ice, still wrapping around its victim like a serpent.] Great description!

I didn’t come across any spelling, grammar and punctuation errors, so well done for that.

Overall, I really enjoyed this story. There are so many more examples I’d like to point out, but I would basically be copying and pasting the entire story into my review. I thought your story was written in a creative, unique way and offered a deeper into the Winter Soldier’s internal battle.

Well done! Keep up the excellent writing!

Jaz

Perhaps not your best story, but a riveting look, a visualization, of the turmoil Bucky must have faced in those moments. I have to say, that 'End of the Line' scene might be one of my all time favorites, even THE all time favorite. Thanks for writing!

YES! I LOVE IT! You have gotten Buck's character really well.

OK, that was amazing! The writing was really good and I loved the imagery. Well done!