This is a great first chapter. Your style is very gripping.

Please update soon!

This is so cool! :-) Can't wait for more!

I can't believe it took me so long to get to this for you! Excellent job! Sorry for the short review, but amazing, amazing, amazing job! Love it!

Rook is going to become a mutant. Calling it right now.

And maybe Rook isn't the first to become mutated. Maybe the Forever Knights are trying to create raving monsters out of aliens so humanity will get rid of them or something. *X-Files theme song plays while I cook up conspiracies*

This chapter was a bit rushed, but it was still a decent chapter nonetheless. Very ominous. Not much else to say than that.

I agree with everything WinterComa said. Awesome!
I was really annoyed wth the whole oblivious "I-don't-care" attitude he pulled and I think he went slightly overboard, but I enjoyed how he always got serioous when one of his friends was in danger.
I like the way you changed things up in this fanfiction. I'm still lamenting the fact that Ben 10's creators didn't have you as one of their script writers.

And so the plot thickens...

I always love how protective Rook and Ben are with each other. It's such a contrast to how their relationship was in the beginning. And I love how Ben is actually taking things seriously in this story. Granted, his oblivious, cocky nature is technically a facade, but still, it's nice to see.

As usual, good work.

The fight scene in this chapter is amazing! When you first showed us that snippet it caught my interest immediately and made me want to read more of the story.
I like how you made the Forever Knights more sinister. They were slightly ridiculous in Omniverse. This is much better.

You've got a really interesting story here. I like how you've made it set in Omniverse, but gave it a twist of AF/UA. While I did enjoy Omniverse by itself, I did feel like all the serious episodes were packed between too many childish ones. (Though I did find UA too dark at times...)

Anyway, it seems you've got the beginnings of a great story here. I can't wait to see what you've come up next.

This is awesome (I know I've told you that a million times)
I really like how different from Omniverse you made this. Ben 10 Omniverse had a lot of potential, but they made it too childish.
This ia like Alien Force and Ultimate Alien, only with Rook