You are my favorite author when it comes to Naruto stories. Great story.

Tsunade really seems inept on all things that require a fine touch. At least, beyond what a standard Jonin could handle. She doesn’t seem to have the skills a Kage requires but rather the reputation and combat ability alone

Hahaha go Naruto! Intentionally teasing someone and having emotions

I realize you said you had problems with this chapter at the end, and I mean no offense, but it was poorly done. First off, you can't go using Futon jutsu and then Earth Style a few lines later. Choose English or Japanese, using a mix is just sloppy and lazy. Second, Neko is an experienced ANBU who you had acting like some shy maiden at times. It was a disservice to her character. Third, the whole BK thing was random as hell and should've been explained earlier. Not to mention you said her had red hair.

Lastly, and this is more of a personal complaint, I think Kushina should've displayed more emotion upon Naruto's return. You really have her all over the place at times and it annoys me. No matter what though, this was Naruto's first mission as an ANBU, I think that merits some affection upon his return. Her response to his return, while not exactly cold, seemed pretty uncaring. I mean, his FIRST FREAKING MISSION! HE'S ELEVEN! The kid at least deserved a hug before she straight up ditches him, damn.

I feel as though you sometimes forget what you've written in previous chapters. At times you completely contradict yourself. Other times you simply don't do things your characters say they will. Weren't they supposed to bring Temari with them till Konoha when they returned? Also, there was no point In having a romantic triangle. It was a bad idea. The Naruto you've written gains nothing from it that wouldn't have been more successfully done other ways. It simply detracts from the romantic plot. Ino could've been just a friend. Someone as emotionally crippled as your Naruto couldn't handle more than one woman.

You write a wonderful story. That said, your abysmal grammar makes it a painful grind.

there is a typo here, gaara became the kazekage, not the hokage

Kudos I like how Naruto took advantage of living in Yondaime's house and learning his techniques.

I’m greatly enjoying the story, the anti-village intelligent Naruto. Though I’m not a fan of the Naruto/Mikoto plan you have going on. I’d personally prefer to stick with Naruto/Temari as you have a great buildup for it. Anyway I’m off to the next chapter.

-Genesis09

Beautifull.

Alright we get that he's the main character and he's cold do you have to make him the main subject in all the other characters conversation and keep stating he's passive respon to everything to tell you the truth its kinda annoying but still not hating just asking to correct those flaws and sage is your best work yet

Super well written story! I enjoyed this read very much, and adore the way you wrote Naruto's character. it was especially refreshing to read the last chapter.

No quede satisfecho :v
I was not satisfied :b
¡I want more! please

super

Your my new favorite fanfic writer keep up the good work