YOU- YOU-
it all makes sense now what the fu-
the plot thickens and hawt DAMN its gonna be good.

Another job well done. These are always so fun to read, between the humor and the goings-on of the team. Excited for more!

Ah hahaha, so my stupid, gutter filled mind was actually correct then. At least in one regard and there's still hope for the other.

May actually is bisexual. Normally I don't like this kind of thing in a non lemon based story, simply because it's most often used as a means to project a fantasy. I'm sure I don't need to say why. But I believe I can see where you're going with this, at least based on a particular line I remember reading before that stuck out to me. I won't say it here though, PM me if you're interested in my theory Dark.

Ah Nate and Rosa, two of my favourite OCs. So perfectly blended in every way, it feels so natural and right to read them and their interactions together. I really love how you've kept true to them in this chapter, you didn't go for the classic confession and romance scene. Tried, true and right. But not for this situation and not for these characters.

Everyone should know their OCs better than anyone, but so often you see writers falling into the trap of trying to please the reader over staying true to the characters, the story and thus pleasing the reader the right way. They make their own OCs out OOC and it always ruins things for the reader. So very, VERY nice to see someone stay true to their OCs.

Nate and Rosa have no need to verbally express their feelings, or mentally in Nate's case, they both know how the other feels without it. Rosa is in his head, always, so they can communicate. She knows how he feels about her and if she didn't feel the same, she could simply tell him. But she doesn't so Nate knows she wants him as much as he wants her.

Their relationship just comes together so perfectly, so beautifully, it almost brought a tear to my eye to see them snuggled together before being rudely awoken by Paul. I gotta admit, the moment was ruined by having to hold my sides as I laughed at Rosa's reaction. She's worse than my wife! XD!

Now for what I feel is the elephant in the room, in regards to this chapter.

WTF is going on with those orbs? Why in the world would Magma and Aqua ever be interested in those orbs? I get your explanation here, but it just... doesn't feel right. Honestly, it feels forced to make the collection of the orbs easy, but also somewhat interesting. But it just felt off and wrong to me. Rosa felt like a Mary Sue in this part, she just came in and ended it in an instant... so... what was the point of having new Magma in this chapter?

If they have a deeper purpose later on then that's fine, but I'd personally make them last longer here and seem like an actual obstacle to overcome, instead of a fly in my soup.

I'll assume Aqua will be more of a challenge, since Rosa's not with them, but still... this is a blotch in the story, not enough to ruin anything, but still a blotch.

Overall, I did enjoy this chapter as I do every chapter you produce in this story. And if I'm right in my previously mentioned theory, I'm going to enjoy this story in particular even more as there are so very few who ever acknowledge such a thing even exits.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter dude, until next time.

Dragon out!

Good chapter but I feel as if some of the plot became really rushed here - the whole orb plot kinda came and went a bit quickly and I thought a lot of it ended up being a little disjointed in the end. I sort of find that the dark order moments end up not really forwarding much of the plot and instead just form some sort of comic relief: I think the second one with Kurt was much better but the first one really didn't serve much purpose.

Two words: I approve.

I hope ash and may end up together or have ash end up with both Serena and may that way both sides win

I know you won't write lemons on this site but this would be a good oportunity to write a threesome hahaah

KNEW IT. I was hoping the rewrite shared the romance idea with the original. We'll see if anything comes of it this time around, as I know you've also decided to steer clear of writing explicit content.

As a side note, I'm loving the names of the side characters you're throwing in here. Way too good. Also wracking my brains to think of where May might be borrowing her powers from, but I seem to be drawing a blank... Very interesting.

I think my single favorite moment of this chapter is when Paul said his words of support to Serena. It fit his character excellently, and I'm glad nobody else there felt the need to comment on it in the moment.

Excited to see how the B-team ends up doing getting the orb from Aqua!

Catch ya later.

i Didnt see this coming at all, but i am very intrigued by what this established development will lead to (as someone else mentioned, ot3 mayhaps? ), especially in light of the poll results! :o
sorry to hear about your mental health struggles, but i'm glad youre good now! looking forward to the next chapter, but take all the time you need. the care you put into this one was extremely evident and definitely worked out in your favour :)

My prediction, the poll results were fairly close. So! You built the potential path for ash/may/serena to all be together by making May bi! Go down the road fam, make our dreams a reality!

Review time! I had an inking of the reveal in this chapter actually! I'm extremely excited for the next chapter as always and kinda am wondering what in the hell the boy squad is doing.

But hey at least Nate is essentially singing out "I'm walking on sunshine" in the meantime it'll be a great mental image all the same.

Best wishes and see you later! -MrBii

hi
i hope u r doing well.
i am a fan of this story plot
if u don't mind will u update the story this month

Calling it here:
1) you think Gen 5 is best Gen
2) hyped for the supersoldier
Hilbert/Hilda fight

You have a good thing giong, man

I am more an amourshipper but in this case I think maybe it would be better if ash chooses may. Serena's mother has died, she went looking for ash and then she has to share him with another, sharing a connection with another girl and the cost? Lose her only parent. At least let serena be strong alone, I would make her leave after all this and find herself again to star a new life, without Ash. Reading till now this is my through

two things:

1) godsdammit why did speedowagon's cameo be a bad guy man? hes speedwaifu forever bruh

nah jk i respect you as a writer amd think that the mk and jojo ref were nice.

2) gen 5 version 2 is life and nate/rosa are the shit i see another man of culture