one of the best written fanfics your third persons pov and the way you told the story / use of vocab is fantastic

I'm glad you showed Shuu to be loving and gentle while being needy at the same time. Think that's very like him, he's a sweetheart under his Byronic façade.

Ok...wow it's well detailed but a few miss wordings. It was very interesting and amusing. I think you got Shuu's wants perfectly. -

Awesome story! So well written!

Best sex ever! the characters is fit, no ooc at all.

This was so hot i came to it ngh~

Oh My FUCKING GOD!
So hooot~
I'm a hentaiga like Laito

What Shuu are so extremely sexy?!
Uhuh I can come only for see his pleasure face!
(Are jokes!~) jajajajaja

YASSSSSSSS

OMG he's still in her

If you ever write another lemon, I suggest also using "ngh" and "unh/ung" stuff like that. This was good, btw.

Original mais j'aime bien c'est une bonne fiction

What the ...?! Omg so awesome... Sexy ..
I want more though its not enough .. Shuu is so sexy fuck

Your really good at writing this stylre, can you do Subaru x yui lemon

woow
I loved
I say I'm fascinated
Thank you for writing it

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