I'm currently on the 2nd chapter, I really wish that I could never reach the end of the story

I loved this story, and your writing. I have a request, and would be extremely happy if you can write it. Can you do a Bleach/DxD where Ichigo has a harem, or just Rias, or Koneko

Wtf, why is the number 5 espada so weak to just be kidnapped not by other espada but weaker arrancers? Nel should have been able to kill all of them with out a thought instead you turned her into a complete weakling. Pathetic

This was a fantastic read well done

This would be nice if your dialoge made any sense at all. Your dialogue is rambling. It's just opainful to read. People don't talk like this. People don't tell each other things like this. People don't reveal things unless they have a reason to. Your writing fails in all of the above.

I like it a lot very fun to read, it can be serious and giddy at times but that’s a good story setting it gets me interested in story’s like this shame there isn’t more to this story I would really love to read more of this fanfic.

Firstly I wanna say I think I'll really enjoy your story. I find it pretty interesting, and I always did think Nel and Ichigo would be cute together, your writing isn't as bad as you made it sound in the note at the beginning of the chapter but I saw what you meant though.

A maze runner reference lol very nice

Yeah, I see why this needs a rewrite. The notes in the middle of the story are distracting, and Ichigos POV feels a bit too self-aware. Not to mention he is narrating for himself. A lot of the things he says feel uncomfortable and unneeded. "I heard a cero go off in the distance, I guess I should go check it out" could be replaced with "I could hear the hum of a cero as it went off in the distance and decided I should go and check it out."

Total trash he's a hollow have him act like a hollow not a telly tubby

Story sounds good but I can't stand the povs

I’m sure your rewrite will be excellent, this feels like a rough draft but the potential is there for sure. Perhaps next time make Ichigo more in then with instinct? He’s a hollow after all as it is you made a saint who’s only foreseeable crime would be if someone killed/maimed Nelliel.

Kyoka doesn’t work on Ichigo.

What a ride that was. Loved it

This is great it really shows what it would be like if ichigo was a hollow instead of shinigami