The interactions between the children and their parents was cute, especially the part with Danny and the end.

Now then for the fic in general, I'd say the romance between Danny and his various paramours feels rushed. It can be broken down as girls appears, Danny is nice to girl, girl falls in love with Danny.

You could have Danny spend some individual time with each girl, alongside the child for those that have one, in order to flesh out their relationship.

Also Danny becoming king of ghosts doesn't seem to have any impact on the story. You try having Danny improve things in the Ghost Zone so it is less chaotic.

I would have liked to see Sam and Paulina added to the harem. As well as Valerie and Star officially added to it.

I think this chapter stuck to close to the show in some areas. If Danny knew about Vlad spying on him he could have just gone and confronted him about it.

Danny's going to need a bigger house.

It was Clockwork wasn't it? How gave the blood.

The portion with genderbent Danny feels like a joke that overstayed its welcome.

Danny can never catch a break, can he? Though maybe he could delegate some things to Fear.

When shouting out the girls names Danny forgot Pandora. Actually after the ghost reinforcements appeared Pandora seems to have disappeared.

I think the whole give Danny blood from lots of monsters is jumping the shark.

I assume the ghost in the blue cloak is Tara. Who has powers over space, as opposed to Clockwork's over time.

Why would Danny's armor have an M on it?

Why didn't Pariah Dark just kill Perona now that he has her?

There's a bit of a plot here. Danny says he had no idea about the amulet influencing him. But in chapter 8 after he showed the amulet to Pandora he clearly stated that it had been trying to influence him.

Spenelope? Seriously? She could have gone with Penny or something else.

Danny should have put laxatives in Vlad's food.

Perona is coming off as a Mary Sue with everyone find her attractive. And there's not much to her character. Speaking of which none of the other girls in Danny's harem have shown much characterization either. You could have a chapter where Danny hangs out with them individually to showcase some things they like or dislike.

There are times here and in other chapter where you identify the wrong speaker.

How did Valerie see Star kissing Phantom when they were in an invisible shield?

The name Tara doesn't anything to do with time. There are better options like Amser, Horada, Saniya or Tokemi.

Sam is not going be happy if she ever finds out about Danny murdering innocent trees for training.

I see you transferred Sam's line about Jazz to Star, but would Star really know Jazz that well to be able to tell?

Why didn't Danny simply think of giving Aragon's amulet to Pandora to put it in her box?

So Danny spend a couple years in another world training and has a harem of several powerful ghosts, yet the events happened more or less the same as they happened in the episode?

I'll be honest this chapter was a chore to read. It feels disjointed from the rest of the fic.

Police can't bring in a minor for questioning without permission from their parents. A police chief would (normally) not be the one to question witnesses.

Michelle's conversation with Danny make her look very unprofessional. Her "you must be pretty weak" line makes it seem like she puts the blame on Danny for being bullied. Not to mention her rant at Danny for wanting to be an astronaut instead of a cop. And in the end she didn't even ask Danny any questions related to the investigation.

Agent Alpha and Operative O are different people. Only the head of the GiW is an agent, the rest are operatives.

If Michelle ever reports that conversation, then Agent Alpha and by extension the GiW would be in big trouble.

Please update your story soon!

Welcome back... and thanks for the good read.. had to re read everything tho but its time well spent

Danny sure doesn't look like he has mastered any art from his demonstrations, everything aside from the sword fight reads more like the demonstrations of an apprentice, capable but severely lacking.

The fight scenes are pretty bad, their fast paced and not very intriguing. Their pretty predictable too. I would recommend adding more suspense and diversity to the moves used.

"I've been training in another world" you don't need "to."

"In fact, I've been training for a long time now" the way you wrote it isn't proper English.

I would recommend a beta.

Great Chapter!

Liked the interactions with the kids and parents.
Ahh Clockwork and the ultimate enemy begins.

Keep Up The Good Work!
Thanks For The Meal.
Till Next Time!
Stay Safe!

Will u continue Re-activating my heart?

lol great chapter UWU
You don't need to be hard on yourself dude we all understand how annoying things may be, i mean look at the planet's condition...people die some in pain and stuff but look at the bright side we all are here for you dude Excelsior as well as awesome work