*CONFUSION*

ohmygawd that ending killed me xD i literally squeaked (my sister called me weird .-. xD)
this was amazing!~

ok you or I have badder spelling since my computer loves to mess up my sentences ) this was gooooood

yes

Technically speaking, the story is pretty good. The plot is nice and I like how the way you wrote it in such a manner wherein it's soft like a gentle caress. Haha-

BUT

You did have a few grammatical errors here and there though for me, it's okay concerning that maybe you were just tired or too lazy to even edit it. -Believe me, I'm always lazy to even edit my own stories-.

I like it, really. And I think a sequel for this would be good like after they have dated/hang out.

Yep, that's all.

It's not bad, you did pretty well story wise. There as you mentioned at the end grammatical and spelling errors, also certain parts of the story were a bit difficult to understand. Overall its pretty good, spend a little more time and look over your work a bit more and your writing will surely flourish.

yes yes please do a sequel

This was so cute! I'd always liked this ship, and this was very well written~! :) I can't wait to read more from you c: You had a bit of a problem with punctuation, such as leaving full stops out before the closing quotation mark, but other than that, it's pretty good!