Please keep it coming

I have a bad feeling that Grey is final villain in the story. Frankly I feel that he would do better as comic relief/petty villain instead as it will be more according to character for him. Evil villain that patiently builds his strength for years is simply not Grey's style.

Also I very much enjoy the idea of seeing him harshly shot down by Juvia at this point as his 'affection' is only rooted on jealousy at best. With Natsu having taken someone that he took for granted out of his life. Seriously it is fully Juvia's right to move on given that he never even bothered with her until she became Natsu's queen.

I also feel that Lissana's former relationship was a glossed over a bit given all the lovemaking that was going on. Sure the sexual punishment was all nice and good, but I was honestly wanting to see a bit more emotion out of Natsu given that Lissana was the first girl he probably ever crushed on. I honestly found myself kind of wanting the mate mark to 'not' appear or for Natsu to simply chase her out in a bout of emotion. I feel that she should have had to stubbornly crawl her way up from the bottom and 'earn' her mate mark.

Maybe have Lissana refuse to leave only to get thrown out. Wait outside the house only to be chased off by one of the other girls. Have her beg, cry, and plead for a second chance. Explain the actual story behind her dating Laxus (maybe reveal that she was in fact manipulated into the relationship due to her naive nature or something). Have Natsu not trust new girls than the one's already in the harem for a year or so. You could have even had her go crazy due to the addictive properties of his seed and be reduced to nothing more than a mere pet in the end.

Mira obviously wasn't happy with her sister hiding things from her and following it with lying to her about the depth of the affair could have made their relationship even more strained. Mira trusted Lissana and Lissana betrayed that trust. Her and Juvia in my mind were equally as likely to cast her out from being with Natsu. There was just so much potential with that whole situation and I just feel like it all went under the radar in favor of some punishment play. Even having all them sit down and talk it over would have been more fulfilling.

Anyways clearly I got fairly immersed in the story and am finding Juvia to be a far more endearing character than I would have thought. Keep up the good work and good luck with whatever it is you are pursuing at the moment.

Man, I reread this story every once and a while and I always tear up when I remember reading through it the first time and dreaming of how this would progress. Thank you for making such a wonderful gem. RIP.

Be nice if you updated.

Plz update

Nice story

you dead or do you just not update any more

You should continue with this story. I like it! Plus, not a lot of people out there have good lemons including Millianna.

please update this is soooo good i need to read more

Man when you coming back we miss your storys

Can you bring out Natsu’s demonic side too. U know. Demon lust hardcore lemons

Poor LISSANNA

Juvia is evil

UPDATE PRETTY WITH NATSU ON TOP!

I love ur chappys

That was very good can't wait o read next chapter

Like this but here us a type:
Use ropes, cuffs, collars, poles, ballgags, leashes, kinky clothes, whips, chains, masks
To increase the smut to 11