I like your writing. The character of Temari isn't just some violent, rude person. She has her defence around people. Most of the fanfic I have read showed a more brutal persona. Which I feel so unrealistic. I hope you will continue to write about Temari and Shikamaru. More like a love story, their journey from acquaintances to marriage. I look forward to more Shikamaru and Temari moments. Fighting...

Sweet reward for the shadow wielder when the lights went out. It was rewarding to see Temari see him when he exposed his feelings and finally give in to her own desires.

Nice flow and characterization :)

Kinda angsty, very in character, and nice and sweet:-)

Very well written. It was a pleasure to read.