i realy wanna read that mass effect fic.

The magic of Mahouka is superior to magecraft since I read almost all the volumes it is fascinating since the science explains how the magic works.

Tatsuya is a new set of monster sure he is a hero in the story but his magical power is greater than the friends of Shirou.

Tatsuya was created as a trump card for revenge against the world by Maya, and he has enough power to destroy the planet.

The power of Tatsuya converts water into thermonuclear energy by ounces, and the world is about 75 percent water so the boy can easily crack the crust of the planet.

Pretty good!
Thank you for the chapter.
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Critique:

There are a LOT of small errors in this chapter that need to be Proof-read & edited and reposted.
HOWEVER, the two most troublesome problems to fix are both NARRATIVE problems.
These two problems are:
1).
You wrote here that Rin knew about Merlin's apprentice because of an old book they'd found.
THIS IS A PROBLEM BECAUSE you previously spent half of another chapter on how finding such a book WAS ALL JUST A LIE that the girls & Shirou used to explain how they knew about the Grail Ritual and the magcraft knowledge they spread around.
2).
The second problem is that you have Zelretch talking about the consequences of making the BOND connecting Shirou and the girls together. THE PROBLEM HERE IS THAT you wrot it here like it was something that Shirou and the girls somehow did, RATHER THAN THE BOND BEING SOMETHING THAT ZELRETCH DID, with out them asking, I'd like to add.

Okay dropped. You just had to throw that stupid cup into this. I was enjoying reading about Shirou and the others being OP. I do not really want to read about them getting their asses kicked by servants and Tatsuya not being able to do anything to the servants because of their magic resistance.

It's only a small error but you misplaced Shirou's name with Tatsuya at the very ending of the omake.

A bit confusing but still a nice and necessary chapter. Looking forward for more.

Interesting chapter, where we first see part of the reasons for Irisviel's proposal to the twins and with Maya actually considering it.

In addition to starting to lay the foundations for the sequel that would involve Mass Effect, and this promises, because given what you propose in this chapter, something vital for the survival of all is if those chosen by Gaia and Alaya can face the Reapers, and an important factor for this is that they can do it without depending on the technology of the Protheans, hence the importance of technology based on magic and not on the zero element and the reaction of the rest of the galaxy to magic and its miracles (such time if magic can heal the weak immune system of the Quarians or the genophage in the Krogans, or extend the life of the Salarians)

Given what was mentioned by the creator of the current Magi-Tech, then, even if the events of the imminent catastrophe are in two hundred years, due to the versatility of magic, we can still see the protagonists and other casts of this story being active in the sequel (at least see Kiritsugu have more children with his girls and what role they would play in the story; same as Shirou and Tatsuya in their respective harems)

It would also be an interesting twist to see that Cerberus is not a rogue organization, but an active part of the fronts for the defense of the earth, and for example, of Miranda Lawson and her sister, to see what kind of magic system they would have (instead of biotics), as with Ashley and the others Alliance soldiers; and how would be their relationship with Shepard (the version, he/she, who would be the protagonist, maybe the Ritsukas - he/she -of Fate GO could fulfill that role, in addition to Shepard's relationship with the Emiyas)

About the Omake with Semiramis, I think there is a mistake, because in the part where the girls are going to get to where Semiramis and Shirou are, you mention that Semiramis is with Tatsuya, being that it should be Semiramis and Shirou; and by the way, poor Tatsuya, he is about to suffer the same as his older brother, because his girls seeing the effects of Rin, Sakura and Illya's bond with Shirou; and with Illya implying that the bond the girls have with Tatsuya is similar, they will want to experience the same and hence, another exhausted Emiya, maybe three Emiyas, if Kiritsugu's girls, especially Irisviel, try to make a similar ritual to expand their magical abilities, mainly Kiri's.

Good luck and keep it up.

What the hell happened author?

WHAT THE HELL HAPPENED AUTHOR?!

You really decided to go the x-overs route and so late in the game. Just great. You just ruined what I liked about the story. Didn't you have enough loose ends and characters already? Sigh.
Best of luck!

Nice chapter, and may the god save Shirou soul, Amen.

in all honesty i am lost about the lore of your fanfic it contradicts common sense and the the original material
first the soul link is only foe the third magic they should have died
second . why would the nations of the world let what amounted to 4 nuclear weapons not loyal to any one walk freely
third. simmaris why in every thing ?
fourth . they should have been curp stomped by the survents . the only experience they had is being rag-dolled or mana batteries in the grail war . its stated that even the weakest survent can kill the kill modern magi with ease with out plot armor .
fifth . the only reason iriseviel accepted the affair in fate/zero was because she was going to die and rins and sakuras father had the right legally in your setting to sell sakura to the mautos so why did he lose the case if the law is on his side .

Nice, didn't expect characters from Ancient Magus' Bride and sorcerer's apprentice to appear. Keep up the good work.

This was an amazing chapter, now the sequel is confirmed in story, I love this story, I love how much this story has grown, please don't stop, this is incredible work.

This is the worst chapter of this story

Kinda wished you left the sequel stuff till after the grail war. Wanted it to be more fate related or at the very least have Saber and Rider be summoned. Still good story.