This was incredible! It was by far one of the best written stories I've found on this site in a lone, long time. I've spent all my free time the last few days reading this and i could not have spent it better.

I love all the developement Pride's gone through- negative and positive, and constantly changing, just as everyone goes throjgh good and bad changes. i like that she wasn't always a good person, and that she had her moments of weakness... it made her seem more real.

I also really liked your portrayal of Solas, and Cole. It was also really nice to experience so much of Thedas' history. Rather than just hearing about the events un one specific game, you gave us practically EVERY major event, and i loved it.

And i appreciate how dark you made the world. The secrets that the inquisition kept from the Herald, the underhanded politics and the crimes committed during the wars... all of it just made Thedas seem more realistic and gave it more dimension.

Thank you for writing this and i hope you keep it up, because you're an amazingly talented author. I'm also curious to see if we'll ever hear more about Fen and Pride in the future- I'm really looking forward to them ripping open the Veil and reintroducing the Fade to Thedas. I really hope they get a happy ending. After everything they've been through, i truly hope they get some peace and happiness together.

It cannot be put into words how profoundly this book has impacted me. Truthfully, I was surprised it was so long and if I am to give any constructive criticism, it would be to break the story down into separate books because each arc is certainly deserving of it. It really has been a pleasurable and thought provoking read. The theme of Pride was ingeniously implemented and delicate issues handled handled remarkably well. I find that authors of struggle to pace their stories along with the character development and emotion. However, you have displayed amazing skill in this regard. This book has evoked so many emotions in me and left me pleasantly introspective. Should you ever choose to continue this beautiful story, or any other for that matter, I would be most thrilled. Thank you for the experience of a lifetime.

NOOOOOOOOOOO!
PLEASE, DON'T END?!
I need more, I need a sequel. That was fantastic and gripping.
I have had many late, and even some sleepless, nights continuing reading this. You made Fenharel absolutely delicious, and I loved your Pride character. The story just would not let go, I loved every bit of it.

Please make a sequel. I would like to see them back together, and see how they deal with the burning of the world and facing the Evenuris. Even just a little bit of Trespasser and how you show its goings on, would be wonderful!

PLEASE?!

I will freely admit this story drew me in. The author has a talent for conveying emotion and making the reader care about the characters and what is going on in the story.
That said, there are things I need to honestly say that others may not like. First and foremost: This story was too long. Way too long. I will put it this way: if you were looking to print this, publishers would either have you break it into a trilogy, or cut about half of it out. This is because most novels are between 50k to 150k words long, and honestly, 150k is pushing it. Hard. This story was over 270k words long!
Second, while I appreciate the whole “cover the whole history of Thedas” thing, it was unnecessary. This was supposed to be a romance between Joanne and Fen’Harel, and that spark between them got lost in the tedium of the centuries they spent apart. I admit to skipping entire chapters sometimes, and feel that I lost nothing.
Third, a satisfying story has closure. After all the back story and history and junk I had to read through, I was looking forward to some sort of closure. It didn’t exist. The way it ended literally looked the same as any chapter, and part of me wondered if the author got bored and just walked away from the story. I’m not necessarily talking about a fluffy happily ever after ending. I’m talking about something that feels like an ending at all. Again, the whole premise of the story was this chick’s love of Fen’harel, and there is no closure! I would not have cared if she told the guy to stick it where the son doesn’t shine by the end, just as long as the whole thing resolved somehow. No such luck.
Overall, I like the writing style of the author, but I feel this story needs refining, and probably some serious abridging before I put it on my list of favorites.

It took some time to get used to first person present tense, as I have never really come across it much, but the slight discomfort was totally worth it. I look forward the conclusion!

Wow just wow this entire book has got to be the best fanfiction I have ever read the only part I was confused on was the beginning because I don't know the lore for Dragon age a lot besides inquisition so pleas continue the good work in any more of your books

Dear Elaine de Feu!
Thank you so much for this masterpiece! It is a full-fledged novel which I'm going to print to myself as a pocket book (hope you won't mind). I dream your work could be filmed. Thank you! Please continue on writing, you really have talent.

Omg I just read this whole thing over the previous week and have loved every minute of it. Thank you for providing such an interesting story!

I have been awake 36 hours because even when I tried to sleep I couldn't because this story had me so entranced. I pretty much binge- read this and I will definitely come back and read it again at a more reasonable pace. I cannot describe the emotional impact this has. I've laughed and cried and wallowed and god my family thinks I'm crazy right now. Fean'Na changes so very much in subtle and obvious ways but given the circumstances she's in it feels natural. I've read stories based on a similar premise before but it always felt like the character transition from lighthearted Earth dweller to hardened killer was rushed and forced. Fean'Na's actions never really shocked me because they feel within the bounds of her ever expanding character. I felt sad that she had been changed to that point but never shocked that she'd reached it. Plus the events themselves were very well thought-out. The way you built up the image of Arlathan before tearing it down and then mirrored it in Tevinter was brilliant. I also love how you slowly disconnected her from Earth even as Thedas became more and more heartbreaking for her. I also loved that even though we all knew she was being stupid and of course Fen cares they didn't immediately get together. Plus the way you continued Fen's character by having him trick her time and again was great. it also shows that to some extent she had idealised him in the time apart because after her suicide attempt she admitted he would likely trick her again and theoretically accepted this. I would dearly love a sequel and just want to say that if you ever published a book I would definitely buy it. great job

Well, that was a nice story. I'm interested if your are going to continue it? Either waiting for DA4 or writing your on?

I love this! But the sequel is a little odd and doesn't feel like it's from the same story. But I do hope you post it here on ffn.

Holy smokes this story was a roller coaster... a good one, don't get me wrong, but my heart has been wrenched this way and that and left bruised! I'm sad that this is the end, but I'm glad that I've read this story. I tend to dislike AU's, but this once was so original I couldn't stop reading.

Here's the thing; it's a long, difficult, confusing read, and I love it. I can honestly say, you have made the length of time come through, 100 years may not have actually passed between me beginning this book and getting half way through, but I'm telling you now, the tension made my heart ache for Fean'Na to jump back into Fen's arms. You really succeeded in conveying a sense of time and conflict, making a human (in personality and flaws sense) character, not some perfect and untouchable person. Sure, the read is complicated, and certainly emotionally confusing if you rush through it, but a good book should be savoured like fine wine, and that's just what you encouraged with this book; processing and understanding. I don't think I have been this immersed in a story for a long while, and I do hope you'll post a sequel or some form of continuation eventually; for now however, my heart shall cry for Fean'Na and Fen, and I may even revisit this read again, if only to enjoy the composition over story. Please don't feel disheartened by criticism, for it is such things that can motivate us to do better; you are doing brilliantly in my opinion.

was there going to be a sequel?

I have come to despise your character. Utterly disgusting filth of a human being.