should have been longer

nice dude

Rushed

Your story was good but their was no plot line I think you need to from you story a little more good luck

Make a sequal!

I really liked the concept of this fanfic. It was overall pretty good, : / A little rushed though, u should have at least
Put in more details/ emotions occurring during the main events-er since like , every1 of them was an important event, most of them. & one last concern, Duuuude, WHŸ didn't u put in Grey, Cona, Elfman or even Lucy?
They're some of his closest friends that could have totally helped him through all of that scaring , emotional exhaustion he had to go through!
But again great job with it , it was mostly enjoyable ; )
-peace