I absolutely adore this story, with it being not only one of the first fanfics I read, but one that got me into fanfiction in general, as well as making me ship Kazuichi and Mahiru. Their interactions were amazing, especially at the amusement park and when they had dinner the first time (“asshole dad get-togethers” still cracks me up). Excellent work.

I'm not interested in this ship, but it was great story. Well done!

I have to say I really enjoyed this story. I found all the events to be quite fluid and interesting and I always wanted to keep reading. My only gripe about the whole thing is that Sonia was quite a bit OOC, but that's just a personal preference. I completely understand as to why you wrote her like that as it was what moved the story along.

This was a fantastic story! Even though I shipped Gundham and Sonia, I always felt bad for Kazuichi Souda. I actually found him to be a pretty cool guy, and felt he deserved someone in hie life, even if it wasn't Sonia. I just couldn't figure out who... Then I came across this. This story is beautifully written, and made me forever ship Souda and Koizumi. You did a good job making them look good together, and I'm glad there are some authors out there who are showing poor Souda some love. he fan fiction did make me hate Sonia for a period of time. (I've come to forgive her a little bit after the apology, but am glad Souda didn't end up with her. Souda and Koizumi forever!) I'm glad you wrote this fan fiction, and I'm excited to see what you'll write next. Keep up the good work!

Peko has no boundaries. Oh my god! She actually drugged someone!

I love how Mahiru is not taking any of Souda's shit.

Felt like this deserved a review,

A good short read, granted there was a few spelling mistakes, mostly when it came to names. I liked the incorporation of the other characters. I can't help but feel like Sonia was slightly OOC. But it's been so long since ive played so I kind of forgot about her character. All in all, I liked, haven't seen many stories on this ship either- so dare I say, best one there is?

Reviewed from my phone, mistakes are probably present.

Now i have to see fuyuhiko peko

Will the epilogue going to be about them?
I'm saying this because I'd love to see more of Hinata & Nanami or Peko.

I thought it was lacking, but I object my first impression of this chapter.

The fact that the dialogue itself has so much emotion being embedded in them that it does not need an explanation of what they were feeling.

Still, the part where Souda realized he liked Mahiru felt somewhat rushed without a description of his feelings for her. If you can put in that part, I think it would be better..

The dream freaked me out, though

The story has been an fun and quick read and I like how it is updated fast compared to other stories.
I do wish to see what will happen with Hiyoko and Sonia once the news is spreaded. As the others reactions.

My god , what's next i want to see more

I see improvement and it fits well. The teeth clenching and the eyes bloodshot are ways to tell me their state of mind and physicality. It's good, but from the looks of it, it can be improved even more.

That aside, I like the dialogue, but a tip:
"You seem a little different today." Said Hinata. (At the end of the dialogue, you should put a comma instead of a full stop, but otherwise the exclamation marks and the question marks are fine. Plus, Said should be lower cased) The same goes for the rest of it: Asked, Began, Defended, etc.. They should all be lower cased. Take this advice with a pinch of salt.

The story is getting slightly intense, mate. Damn, I feel bad for Sonia, but being bias for Souda for a moment: screw you, Princess. I like this chapter a lot.

Sonia is such a bitch, ain't she?

The reason I don't favourite or follow this story is not because it isn't good, but it's because I feel it is too rushed.

Maybe it's because of the way it's written, but nevermind. I absolutely adore the plot and the setting. Even though I said some probably nasty stuff up there, never go down because of it.

The story is good. I encourage you to keep doing this. Though, one advice: bring the dialogue alive with a bit of description of the conversation. Also, project their emotions in words: I just feel that it's good to do that. You may ignore my advice if you want. To each their own ways.