Well, I knew what I was going to read before I clicked on the story. I was immensely disappointed, just like I had assumed I would be before reading it.

Zelda is EXTREMELY out of character, especially Samus. You were trying to make this into a cute little story about the two of them, right? Unfortunately, in my own opinion, you failed at that. I did not think this was cute at all.

The dialogue did not grab my attention. At all. Period. It was like the dialogue did not match with the characters' personalities in any way. There wasn't that much description in the story either. You might want to work on that as well.

Overall, this story did not convince me that Zelda and Samus are cute together. It did the complete opposite.

Well, anyway, I hope you write something better in the future.

Have a good day.

.-.