A very lovely story, your message was well conveyed.

Awesome idea! Really loved the way you put it forth.

Hey Laura! Happy birthday!

I honestly cannot wait for this Lily fic, I love the concept, and your prompts sound awesome.

[pretending that didn't exist] - I imagine there's a 'she' missing?

[Lily asked] - Lily had asked

Wow, that's cold-blooded of Petunia. I can really feel Lily's frustration through your writing. We all know Petunia's motivations, but it's really heartbreaking to see it from Lily's side, unable to understand and not even offered a proper explanation.

[he's turned you against me] - Well, hello there, Anakin Skywalker. All of what Snape is saying right now seems to fit my idea of Snape in some way or another, although I'm uncertain if he would have been so blunt about it and if he would have ever told Lily he loved her. I'm not sure Snape was even aware that this was what he thought back then, but it's still an interesting exchange happening because he does, here.

[found themselves stood] - I've never heard about this before. I don't know if the same rules apply to 'stand' as they do to 'sit', but I couldn't find any rules on it when I searched Google.

[truth but] - truth, but

This was very sweet. I think it's a very good point to get across, that if people stop listening, they stop trying, and that's the end of a relationship. It's so very simple and yet so very strong. Your writing is very strong as well; it flows nicely, you're varied in your word choices and sentence structure.

It was very enjoyable :)

This was a great start. I love Lily & Petunia fics, especially when they focus on any issues they might have had during the Hogwarts holidays. I thought that it was interesting that you included Petunia’s imaginary friend - I think that there was no way Petunia still played with an imaginary friend, so as Lily said, it proves how childish she was being in regards to the whole situation!

You did a good job of characterising Petunia during the argument. I thought it was clear to see how jealous she really was, with reference to her body language (reddening in the face, growing defensive), and was choosing to act out instead of accepting what was what.

Choosing the attack on Mary McDonald to be something that caused Lily to break off her relationship with Snape was definitely something that would fit well into canon - personally I’ve never seen it being realistic that she would fully stop talking to him because he called her a Mudblood, I always had the impression that there would be more to the story than just that. The Feb event prompt was used really well here! I think Snape is exactly the kind of person who would love her in a fairly possessive manner. The theme of rejection was really well presented here.

Wow. Lily’s outburst to James was truly impressive. It’s a sequence I never would’ve expected; I think everyone assumes that Lily and James were this knot of a couple that could never be separated, but in reality this is exactly the kind of thing that would happen to a couple during such a war crisis.

I really enjoyed this. Great job!

Very good! Take that Snape! Just because Lily isn't in one of the people he tortures(or killing list) doesn't make him a saint.

This fanfic looked really interesting, and I wasn't disappointed! It was incredibly well written and emotional, and thank you for writing this and keep up the good work :)

Yes, you achieved your writing objective. It was interesting. Thank you for sharing it.

I loooooooove this. :D You're a great writer. I think that you definitely got that message across. :D

It's actually sad, Lily never realized she was part of the problem with her own pride. She wasn't always right, she never thought of what could the underlining problem with Severus (who by the way never said "I love you," to her, he was scared of losing her and never said that she belonged to him, he wasn't possessive, well only when it came to the Marauders.). With the whole Severus and James business, Lily is a complete hypocrite. She is not the great paragon of all knowing what is right, she is a coward in some aspects.