Reviews for Not this time, Fate
RunOnSentences chapter 51 . 10h
Phew. What a journey. That was a very long character development. Frustrating at times, but ultimately a good story.
RunOnSentences chapter 15 . 7/26
God I gotta admit that I fucking loathe this jaune. He’s such a fucking asshat
RunOnSentences chapter 13 . 7/26
Holy edge lord
RunOnSentences chapter 13 . 7/26
Jesus cmon already edgy boy Extreme
RunOnSentences chapter 10 . 7/25
Man Jaunes personality has given me whiplashed
Petrus streamrock chapter 50 . 7/24
Man... It's been 2 years since I last read this fict. And it's still beautiful as ever. This is canon for me Coeur, this is RWBY for me (Or JWBY?). Not the RWBY in the show, and especially not the RWBY after vol.3. And now I can see another beautiful story is in progress that is Null and The Beast of Beacon. I read the Beast of Beacon because Adam is my 2nd favourite character, and I think It will delve into the possibility of Adam and jaune becoming friends in that life. The life that this story hinted at their final fight. Only as friends though, not some gay yaoi relationships.

Anyway, thankyou for this Coeur and College fool, this fict is special. Now excuse me as I cry in a corner. God bless.
ShadowFanFlame chapter 51 . 7/23
It's been a long time. The last time I read this, I didn't have a favorable opinion of it. I decided to re-read it and finish it, just to fully have an opinion on it.
I have a hard time swallowing the ending. It's purely because of canon, which you should throw away when you read fanfiction, I know, but you wrote and finished this after Volume 3 done. With that in mind, I can't get the thought that Salem is here STILL and she is just planning to work around it, or attack in another lifetime. That doesn't solve the issue, just delays it. Say Salem doesn't exist, then the ending works. Everyone is happy, and Jaune gets to rest. Joan is born, everyone gets to enjoy their life. But, then what was Fate even after?
Fate being a real person bugged the hell out of me. You say time travel fixing a time travel story is expected, but now it's not a intangible inevitability that we cannot fathom, it's a person. With emotions? If Weiss had just turned the clock back to a few minutes before her death suddenly, killed Cinder, and rescued Jaune that way, that would be way more believable. Well, believable might be a big word, understandable is probably correct. With Fate having goals and emotions, what is she? A God? She's omnipresent, but I have a hard time thinking she's all powerful. But she is, but she ISN'T. Teleporting Weiss to Jaune to save what she caused? Why? Why not, have it not happen at all? Or, if she was still focused on her goals, teleport Mercury and Emerald to the tower. Or teleport Blake and Yang to god knows where. Have Raven not be able to save Yang because until she was almost dead because she's a dick. If Fate causes everything, cause Jaune to realize what he should do. What should he do? Follow canon? It was her fault he didn't. Or was that just him? Why can people defy Fate? Is Fate not even Fate, just a person trying to be so? If she just wanted him to not die, just have him go back a couple of minutes on his first time. Then, have Ren and Nora come help him. But, this all could have been Fate's goal to. To have him bang Weiss. Fills in a couple of holes, but many more come with it.
Let's stop talking about Fate, and start talking about him walking up in Ansel. First off, the world not moving with him as a whole proved that the world continues after death. Which is huge, because that means his actions DO matter. No matter how many times he dies, his friends and family will feel his death every single time. Which, is a tool you could utilize easily. Instead of him having a happy ending, Weiss uses her deus ex machina powers (to be fair, the time powers are apparently canon. Probably not this application of them, but still) to communicate with the Jaune in the new universe. They have a heartfelt convo, and Jaune realizes his life means so much more than he could ever imagine. So, with that newfound determination, he ventured on. It could end there, and I'd be fine with it. Or, you could continue it. Now Idk, it might just be me, but I prefer good opened ended endings then medium happy endings. It felt very contrived, which was such a shock.
The story by itself? I liked it. While in my mind I might have preferred him to stay with his family, that's just my own personal preference. It was a good and engaging story. When Ruby just called his experiences a nightmare, my breath was lost. I reacted the same way he did, which was crazy. I couldn't imagine how he felt with what happened with Nora in that past timeline where she went along with it only for awhile. Must have been pure shock and sadness. Also, with Ozpin being revealed as a person who never dies, he certainly does seem like a hypocrite not believing Jaune, but that probably was not known when developing this. Jaune convincing Weiss was interesting. Pyrrha would have believed him in the same position right? So I wonder...
Overall, it was good quality. I can't say it was bad, that would be dishonest, but certainly not the best I've seen. I'll be interesting to see if your writing has an upward trend in other stories (Like White Sheep) and, I'll see if the ending to something I was following (Forged Destiny) was better. Have a good day!
TheSlySage chapter 51 . 7/19
the tears that came out of my eyes when Weiss said...

it's over you're free..

i am crying so hard
TheSlySage chapter 47 . 7/18
sure... why not

such a prof Arc thing to say lol
TheSlySage chapter 46 . 7/18
whyyyyy! i am literally crying
TheSlySage chapter 43 . 7/18
you are evil...

they are going to walk in on Jaune and Pyrrha talking and I just can't watch its so damn hard to scroll through this!a!

whiteknight forever (in this universe)
Infernus est in animo chapter 47 . 7/13
(This is really for the final chapter but I've apparently reviewed that already, and the second to last, and third to last, and fourth)

God. I remember reading this two, maybe even three, years ago, along with From Beyond and how they've massively shifted several parts of my attitude towards writing, especially in the combination of comedy, romance and drama.

Coming back to it now, along with keeping up with Name of the Game which I'd recommend as well, makes feel incredibly nostalgic for honest tears shed reading this. It's a fantastic piece and one I'll probably read again in another two year. Maybe it'll inspire me to get on with writing of my own rather than the pretty rubbish stuff I've put on this site.

It's truly an inspiration for me, I don't know about anyone else, but I'm planning to read the aforementioned From Beyond again and then catch up with Null, since I haven't read that yet.
SwordsmanZero chapter 6 . 7/13
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Bookworm5556 chapter 1 . 7/8
I must say I can only stand to read about half of your stories. It's always very obvious to me if I can actually read through it because of one reason. The plot. I always either can't stand th plot such as forge or arcanum, or I absolutely love it to death. your stories have no in between. They are all well written, they have good Grammer, and they all have decent lore/background to them. I really like the fact that your stories actually have some length to them. After almost a decade of reading fanfics I've read most of the good ones (that are still up or at least we're when I was looking) and plenty of no so good ones so finding well written stories that actually have some weight to them that don't take a single sitting to read is worth it's weight in gold. Your works are without a doubt the best in the RWBY fandom and can easily gold their own with all the other beat stories of the other fandoms. I was just about to read this story again and felt the need to thank you for all of your hard work making and writing all go these wonderful stories.
sanjiyan chapter 46 . 7/7
Strenght will not bring victory.
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